Departure

an attempt at a form of renga

He goes

Not walking away

- yawning -

Content as purity

- a ritual possession -

- not letting go -

spring afternoon

- sunshine -

Days unseasoned in his checked jacket

The yellow Palace

- pool-

- fallen petals -

- pink -

Dropped soft

as trees reflection

Lay on grass

Drift on ripples

Held by the surface blue sky

Reviews

[writing mojo]

I know nothing of form, but this slipped in the mind like water to rock, a life format penetrated with source..exellent piece

[Michael Oliver]

Renga just means 'linked verse' the mand is leaving - the leaves are falling leaving the trees etc

[writing mojo]

Thank you for the clarification, I will look into this style more.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

tough form...but this poem flows like a waterfall...and drips with intense imagery...

strong feeling emerges.

[Great Aunt Astri]

Simple words painting a picture. I think you made a good job of this renga.