An Autumn

I have been reading Emily Dickinson found her style suite what i wanted to say and the way i wanted to say it in this verse.

      Autumn once here then - once - gone

      How unnoticed - a light - weather purchased

      Punctuation - idles - at a conversations flow

      Effects a passing - outside my window

      Not the subject of gate leaning 

      Not a luminous cloud webbed field

      Skipped on - by Daddy Long Legs

      As the morning light pondering 

      Mists - in the instinct - were debates

      The sun disc - a subtle arbiter

      As a Robin called a change 

      Halted me - aware -of clarion alchemy

      The soft light of an afternoon

      Over there - an appreciation - the trees

      Mellow - humble - mute - bid summers leaf

      And green purpose - a lullaby farewell

      Tonight - a cooling - a flattened sky

      Star bright - untouched - street light jaundice

      To home - wrapped up  - hunched up

      As winter waits - a winter gait

      Moon - white trace - over dark houses

      A falling season - makes redundant - dusk

      Unbothered with a silent stark shining

      thinks a statement and horizon hangs

      What once was - is now - gone

      A seasonal metaphor - on a progress

      Glances back - recalls - beyond - the inward

      Musing - looking - sighs a different breath                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                         

       

 

       

     

Reviews

[magenta24uk]

Full of feelings and I feel a sadness to rejoice in. Once again a journey you have taken me on. Thank you

[emmajoy]

' .. dusk ~~ Unbothered with a silent stark shining ~~ thinks a statement and horizon hangs.. '

I've had to read this three times because of the seemingly stuttering punctuation. Then, at the third read thought that perhaps the dashes were/are like passing seconds and minutes passing, the seeing what's around you, how you feel, how you perceive the Autumnal surroundings, life. Must read more of your poetry and see how it compares.. the same style, or different! Beautiful stanza:

' Tonight - a cooling - a flattened sky ~ Star bright - untouched - street light jaundice
~ To home - wrapped up - hunched up ~ As winter waits - a winter gait '

[Michael Oliver]

Thank you for reading this - I am still looking for a way to present material in a 'real ' way - the way it works in the mind - I know my work is getting more difficult. The use of the hyphen is used here because over the last year in E-mails and conversations I find I have used it more and more. In a way it can be seen as a sign of taking a fresh intellectual path - I think also I want the reader to paticipate in finding a sense in the concatenations that may not occur to me . Thank you again for your comment Michael