To John

this is not about death but about life's affirmation I was gardening and a wild rose caught my attention while cutting the grass.

                                               wild rose white alone

                                               attracts the idle attention

                                               a today beauty fading

                                               pick it? send it?

                                               death arrives so soon

                                               why hasten it's white demise

                                               can it's slaughter prove

                                               my mirrors fixed bloom

                                               all things do pass

                                               our exit will come

                                               a single remembered joy

                                               carried on infinities breeze

Reviews

[John]

I like the poem's troubled affirmation as questions ruffle its calm surface, mostly emphatically at the end of the first stanza, but in the second line of the second stanza, and, for me a question precedes the opening to the final stanza that prompts the slightly defensive 'do', as if the speaker has been challenged and must restate the point.

[Michael Oliver]

I think this is because i see the world in an unsure state - i like the idea as though you see this as a species of dialogue with the other person mute - I sometimes think the lacunas are more eloquent than the words. thank you for a very perceptive review. I shall use this constructively in the future.

[John]

In an unsure state because the artist self is never entirely 'settled' in this world, I would suggest.

[writing mojo]

dark matter...so much to feel and nothing tangible to see..just the space in the currency of being plugged into silhouetting the unknown..great piece

[Cryingkate]

Ah....I love the choice .. the crossroad..
At that moment that single life of a flower was at your mercy
To pick it and end it's life for your wants or to let the flow of life live on.
I am so glad you chose to "let live"

There was more of a Spiritual lesson here then just about a single flower. I don't think it was coincidence that the Rose happened to be a white Rose. symbolic for innocence/purity.

I believe it was a wonderful lesson and I believed you aced it.

[Carlton Carr]

John must be very special to you Michael. This is an exquisite blend of longing, joy, resignation and hope. I really Lovﻉ it's simplicity and fresh, crisp imagery. You are an artist.