Before The Gates Of Alahsar - Original Version - The End.

The final part of, "Before The Gates Of Alahsar.

10. No longer did happy children play, as workers went upon their way, night stars in a day's blue sky, the sun still shining, way up high. These were the nights in the realm of dream, in Alahsar, where all was not as it may seem, the land of dream, the land of love, a gift from the immortals, high above. Now all were safe within the city, still many shedding tears of pity, when far out on Alahsar's plain, great crashing thunder could be heard again. As all in the city looked up to the sky, they saw storm clouds gather, way up high, all followed the Tigress, Alahsar's warrior queen, as she rushed up the steps, to watch this scene. The sky now darkened, as thunder roared, storm clouds gathered, great power was stored, then the storm eye opened and lightning flashed, within the storm, Heaven's power was stashed. Then one bolt of lightning, struck ground from the eye, Turvehr came forth from the thunderous sky, upon his back, the shape of man, both descending as only immortals can. They strike the ground before Utamol, sword comes forth from ground, at Dark Man's call, into the scabbard Utamol does go, then across Badicha, both do flow. Turvehr moving with graceful ease, as the Tigress falls upon her knees, then movement up and down the stair to the now open gate awaiting there. Before the golden gates, the Tigress does stand, tears in her eyes, she cannot understand, this mighty sight that she can see, a Dark man returning from eternity. now tears of joy are falling, as the lonely wolves start calling, and cheers above are gladly ringing, as the Tigress' heart is gladly singing. Then Turvehr, before the Tigress stands, the Tigress reaching up, too touch dark hands, the Dark Man drops down to the ground, now all is still, there is heard no sound. And before these golden gates, the song of love's emotion waits, As dark man holds his warrior queen, before the gates of immortal dream. Then lips do meet and love does sing, love's perfection softly uttering, the words the Tigress needs to hear, to take away all her mortal fear. The Dark Man's love he did ever confer, forever shall he belong to her, now up she is lfted, onto Turvehr's back, now off to follow the golden track. Now the crowds are cheering madly, no more are they feeling badly, Turvehr is speeding across the plain, no more shall the Tigress be the same. Up on lightning bolt, Turvehr rising, clouds do open and all is surprising, angels, they are joyfully singing, love's dream, Turvehr is bringing.

Reviews

[lightsong]

hahaha well You know I was waiting and he took quite a time to come alive again ;> yes happy ending what not? enough sadness with all our real world, just in my opinion write your opening sentence "I have to be me and end with that happy ending" on your author's note so You don't kill the ending of your poem-story, and in your seventh verse isn't it suppose to be "forever shall he belong to her," not "forever shall he belong to you"?

[shadrach hah]

Hi Gounwah, I had two endings for this piece, the one I used, the happy ending as I call it or the ending where everyone is at his funeral pyre and the smoke from the pyre goes against the wind and goes into the heart of the storm. The Dark Man going home. I wrote the line you mean, as it was, because I changed the tense a little for these lines and I had to try and make it rhyme. Thank you for your help in this matter. I shall see if I can change it. "The dark man's love he did ever confer, forever shall he belong to her." What do you think? Have a wonderful Sunday. Love and Hugs always....Mike.

[lightsong]

Yes it’s good like this because if You kept “you” not “her” it’s confusing, now it’s clear and with the flowing rhyme :>

You are always welcome~ hoping your Sunday is wonderful and warm. Blessings 💕

[shadrach hah]

Many blessings back. May the sun ever kiss your pen with gold. Love and Hugs always....Mike.

[lightsong]

awaa! how sweet! may it also ever kiss your pen with gold and your heart with love***