Broken Soul

Drowning in fear, Drowning in hope, Drowning in sorrow Drowning to death

A gasp for breath

Lost the shallow

A ravine of death

Heart is hollow

Spiders in the mind

A swift escape

This death is kind

Street of life will reshape

The mint waves roll

These thoughts are scattered

It was once whole

Now it is beaten and battered

When you are dying

Needless for breathing

There is no point 

After this pitiless beating

A final request

Succeed your role

Do your best

Drown my soul

Reviews

[Darian B.]

Dang, your poetry is really powerful. I've only read a handful of them but wow, your stuff is strong and amazing. I don't know how many more of these I'm going to review because my guess is they would all turn up like this but just once more, well done. It really is powerful poetry

[Michaela Moerke]

Coming from you that is an amazing compliment. I can't thank you enough for even glancing at my writing :)

[Darian B.]

Haha, I don't know that I'm all that special. I'm just a 17 year old trying to figure out life and love but honestly, your writing has really touched me. I'm just glad I did decide to glance at your writing, it's awesome.

[Michaela Moerke]

Well thank you again. If I may correct you, You're a 17 year old with a spectacular talent and an insight to a world with deeper meaning and a love with stronger feeling.