If I had known

Freshman year

the year

the seniors come out to play

the year the girls get betrayed

but you

i thought you were different

i thought you were nice

and sweet

but that all ended

when i lost the beat

of my heart

when i remembered that night

you were older

and i was young

I was by myself

and you I guess

just wanted fun

A conversation

lead to a kiss

which led to a dance

and then apon walking around

you hopped in your car

as i did too

and I buckled in

thinking

that would keep my safe too.

but you didn't want to

go out for icecream

no you wanted nothing sweet

you wanted a naive little girl

one that wouldn't speak

but you picked the perfect girl

because when you covered my mouth

is when i silenced the whole world

Reviews

[Dreamer]

This is great micayla. Very real and the directness of your words makes this piece carry a hint of innocence. No twists, just what it is and that represents the innocence that i assume is taken from this girl. The ending is perfect. It is a contrast to the entire piece because it becomes complicated here. Before the reader is on one course but now there are many paths the reader may take. Each path could be as complicated as the next, demonstrating her now shattered purity. Good piece!!

[Arianna]

dahm. i love the whole thing
the lines that you choose in here make me shudder.
and the innocence that you use to describe something so not innocent
its beautifly done
i think the best line is but you didnt wnat to go out for ice cream, no you wanted nothing sweet.
it really hit me.
well done.
that was amazing

[Krystal Nicole]

Beautiful . . simply beautiful .

[brenda]

wow, amzing way to write this down and shame on him !

[Vaishali..^_^]

:) Beautiful.. Great write..
Thanks for sharing..

[Kelly M.]

Perfectly written with a touch of innocence and truth. I like it. :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Very nice poem, love it. Love the whole build up of the poem to the final ending that is great indeed :)