Hidden

Not everyone has a happy ending...

With a wistful smile I write, my story's end it seems

So settle down for the night, it's one long journey.

I'd tell you the tale of the girl who rose to fame,

but who would remember such a vague pain?

So instead, I'll tell you about the girl who's truest form it seems

to be that of somewhat a deity.

A girl who became a woman, out of force and not by choice

fell in love with men who haunted her day and night.

Some with their love and some with their eyes

Why was she the one with a broken heart a million times ?

Maybe her entity belonged inside the holy walls

 forever to watch and never to speak,

Maybe her body belonged to those, 

who sort her out as weak.

Perhaps this conspiracy was her fault as it may,

for not shouting out louder to those who do not hear.

Youthful days spent mulling over mature regrets,

time outran all her deepest secrets.

As everything comes to a slow standstill,

 she pleads to those who listen.

Come what may of these years ahead, 

keep your soul hidden.

Author's Note

Hey everyone! Let me know your thoughts and helpful comments :)

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This being the first time I've come to your page here, I read your profile about feeling many paradoxes within your personality & then I read this poem which conveys everything thought as a paradox. Point made! By the way, most people would classify me as being outgoing, but I'm also an extreme loner. Humans are never easy to sort out & that's why labels are useless. This poem gets across a strong point, that this girl is scrambled as far as trying to define what she's about, & this is done by SHOWING more than telling since the writing itself spills out in bumps & hops. Like lines 3 & 4 -- puzzling contrast of ideas, fame being a vague pain. "Maybe her entity . . . maybe her body . . ." (everything in this series of lines) -- another puzzling contrast SHOWN instead of telling us about it. So much of this describes my own life, having been raped into womanhood & being considered both a s**t & a nymph, depending on who's tossing around labels (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Mia]

Hi Margie! I had stopped writing a while ago, I found your comment today and I've not read a more haunting review before. Thankyou for sharing your thoughts and my heart goes out to you for every pain youve had to go through. Should you find this comment in time, I hope you choose to connect to me. My instagram handle is @riacarolofficial

[barleygirl]

I'm not into social media, never been on instagram. But I wish you the best in rekindling your writing spirit! (((HUGS)))

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A bright and and all to real piece that gathers momentum before teaching the reader that faith is not always kind, well done, good read.

[Mia]

Thank you very much!