Symphony of Destruction - The Second Movement (Black Sky, Red Rain)

This is the sequel to Symphony of Destruction, hope you guys like this one! Once again, a fantasy caricature of wars today.

Symphony of Destruction - The Second Movement (Black Sky, Red Rain)

The flames descend upon the world. 

O'er distant stars, o'er black skies and red rain,

O'er hallowed cities tall, o'er cold, icy pain

The fires of our hatred kindled to infernos

Manifesting themselves in harsh, bitter reality

Watch as mercy turns to ashes within

As compassion is immolated and purged from our very hearts

As the truth is twisted beneath it all, 

We have come to the end; there is nowhere left to fall. 

High upon raging seas and rising storms,

Beyond black frost and stars forevermore,

Behind you the scourge arises,

Faceless beneath masks of dread and hatred

They strike out as oppressors against the weak and helpless

Crushing all those who dare oppose,

As virtues are tarnished and slowly lost, 

The petals falling off a wilted rose. 

Submit! they cry. 

Submit!

Can you not see that resistance is utterly futile?

Who shall call from within you what humanity still remains?

Upon the ravaged valleys and the lost and the slain

Black tears from oceans deep and rivers tainted

They flow endlessly beyond the waves and ice

Towards our dying destinies and broken skies. 

Raise your hands, tyrant. 

Embrace all that you have done. 

The heavens cry, do you not hear?

The world is broken, can you not see?

The innocent are slain, do you not know?

Are you not satisfied?

And in the rising dawn of darkness

Sweet, beautiful Innocence stares into the eyes

Of her dark, cruel executioner,

Once unparalleled in all her beauty

She now lies in the depths of your vengeance

Awaiting her fate with open arms. 

The blade is raised. 

It all shall never rise again. 

Author's Note

Hope you guys liked this one!
Here is the link to the original Symphony of Destruction:
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/mhidhir94/653007/

Reviews

[Frantzuu]

Outstanding poem man, I love the structure of the poem is great and I find it a lot of fun to read.

[A.Lee]

"And in the rising dawn of darkness
Sweet, beautiful Innocence stares into the eyes
Of her dark, cruel executioner,
Once unparalleled in all her beauty
She now lies in the depths of your vengeance
Awaiting her fate with open arms. "

I loved that stanza. The imagery in those particular lines was just outstanding. Great work.

[trainwreck]

This is really good. Great expression. thank you for sharing it.

[KAREN]

Another excellent write with great flow and imagery!!

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. The language and story was very good.
"Upon the ravaged valleys and the lost and the slain
Black tears from oceans deep and rivers tainted
They flow endlessly beyond the waves and ice
Towards our dying destinies and broken skies. "
I enjoyed this poem. Read like a poem from the great poets. Brought you in and held you to the last words. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Lindsey]

I do like it it is verry good and I enjoyed reading it.

[Linear]

Good work, well presented in poetic form, the futillity of war and the foolish hope that peace can be sustained with a gun

[Aimee Mahathy]

This is AWESOME! *applause* I'm usually not one for all-caps, but seriously, this is amazing! The rhythm of certain lines were so distinct and strict that it reminded me of war drums! And the images of red rain and apocalypse were entrancing! I noticed that the final lines in certain stanzas were just perfect. I can't say how they were so perfect, but it's as though you chose just the right words and put them in just the right order. Wonderful!

[Abd-afeez]

Imagination! imagination! imagination! This is just like you were on that war front feeling their pain with one eyes and looking at the deranged surrounding with the other. Imagination! Its like you were their with your pen and amidst the flying bullet and hovering flames you just write, what you think about this god forsaken war.
Imagination! Its like you want to reach all our soul and deliver your feelings about these wars to us. That you've definately done expertly. I enjoyed this read thanks for sharing.

[Sarah McConnaughey]

Amazing! This is so powerful and entertaining! Thank you so much for sharing!