The Way Of Dishonor (And Redemption)

The Way Of Dishonor (And Redemption)

A Poem by Undying Glory
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My very first attempt at haiku writing. This is about the sad life of the Ronin in feudal seventeenth-century Japan...

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The Way Of Dishonor (And Redemption)

Shame clouds the dark skies
Dishonor stains where I tread
I am too far gone. 

Rain falls with such pain
Blossoms tarnished by my deeds
I am on my own. 

My blades held aloft
Towards fading light so far
I shall not be saved. 

Blossom petals fall
Dying light shining from streams
Crash upon the graves. 

Fields of the fallen
Far beyond the Sundered Realm
Hear the black wind's song. 

Many more like me
Embracing the call to arms
Beyond mountains high. 

Katana raised high
I shall answer the strong call
Upon my honor gone. 

On ancestors past
Upon my ryus so strong
Glory shall be mine. 

© 2011 Undying Glory


Author's Note

Undying Glory
Image taken from Wikipedia
The image is of Miyamoto Musashi, one of the most famous ronin that ever lived.
For those who don't know, when a samurai's master had died or was defamed, a samurai had to commit honorary hara-kiri ceremonial suicide. Those who did not became ronin, master-less samurai, and were viewed with great dishonor.
If you don't like explanations then you may want to omit this paragraph.
This haiku story is based loosely after the battle of Sekigahara in 1600, where many samurai on the losing side became ronin. This battle was also called the Battle for the Sundered Realm. Eventually over a hundred thousand ronin went to fight at the Siege of Osaka. I'm writing from a ronin who's eager to regain his honor at the siege...
Tell me if I should write one for the Shoguns!

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Nicely done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is wonderful great work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Ooooh, I loved this! :D First, it kind of reminded me of WoW, but your author's note really clarified it for me. I love anything to do with Japan, so this was a real treat!
Thanks for sharing! :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


This reminds me of a war poem....great job!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Pros: I've never read much in the Haiku area, nor do I know much of the Japanese culture. Although, I have heard of samurai and ronin. Never of this battle, though. Either way, the lack of understanding the history doesn't hinder anything here. The haiku flows really well and tells its story perfectly.

Cons: None.

Overall: I like this, and think you should most definitely write one for the Shoguns. I'd read it :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Nice imagery in this, wonderful, well written and structured, great job, keep it up~

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very interesting capsules of thought..

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is so beautiful! I can closely relate to the first two verses. You should definitely write more.

Posted 13 Years Ago


wow this is very good and has a nice flow. Yes you should write more!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This is so good! Really magnificent poem

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Undying Glory
Undying Glory

Singapore, Singapore



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The average guy you'd meet on the street, only with a hidden streak. Or several, for that matter. 24 year old, 4th year medical student, studying in Dundee, Scotland. Never underestimate the pow.. more..

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