World Of Sorrow Part 1

Finally, I'm back to raps. Here's another random rap on the world's problems...the first part, that is...

World Of Sorrow

Darkness, imprisoning day

As he watches the hours just bleed away

In a cramped, dirty room, in a big factory

Stuffed to the brim with little kids like he

Working so hard, making toys and goods

But not playing with them like little kids should

'Cause he barely has anything, not enough to survive

While you just go on with your perfect little life

As he struggles so hard, like millions like himself

'Cause you can't even bear to raise a finger to help

And as he sleeps and works on an empty tank

You're just laughing your freaking way to the bank

Wearing those clothes made by people like him

And a million others exploited by companies within

Another voice

Another soul

Lost in the bitter darkness

A world of sorrow

Another song

As it unfolds

Holds their prayers for happiness

For a better tomorrow

Darkness, imprisoning day

As she looks from her window in the endless rain

With the slashes on her left hand, scars on her right

'Cause you beat her and scream at her every day and night

Her pain's too much, it runs too deep

Far too much for any soul to keep

So she reaches for the syringe lying by her side

Filled with what she needs, for all the tears she's cried

And as she injects herself with the dose in her vein

She hopes she'll never wake up again

'Cause you never really knew, and you never really cared

About what you said and the bitter life she's had

To you she's just another one who's too far gone

But you pushed her to drugs, now look what you've done

Another voice

Another soul

Lost in the bitter darkness

A world of sorrow

Another song

As it unfolds

Holds their prayers for happiness

For a better tomorrow

Author's Note

Sorry if it's long...

Reviews

[OT]

brilliant UD!!!! strong stark images, enveloped with a strong foray of rhyming couplets!! what's not to like!!!! great poem!

[Blue tailed kite]

Wonderful poem with powerful imagery...speechless... Loved it.

[Hippy]

its cool nice message i feel it may have lost its word fluency here and there but i cant hear your beat to say for sure

[AmeliaMae]

wow, i really liked this one. it flowed really well.

[HorrorMaster]

I like this one the best.

[Kasey Jones]

Great rap. The flow is perfect. The scenes you describe are haunting but very realistic. I'd love to hear the finished product of this, if you ever do it.

[Ruth]

I don't think its too long at all love!
Its a great piece of work!
A sombre toined hard hitting poem! Well, rap also lol
I can hear this! Would be so cool to hear it done!
Excellent poem
xx

[Senseless whatever]

Not long at all. Could be a rap, or could be a graphic novel in the making. Great job.

[Signet]

I'm totally speechless, you're poem is very touching. It's so sad people have to face such pain and misery in their lives, makes me value the comfortable life I'm living.
I like everything about your poem, really!
Keep Writing!

[Haifa]

no need for sorry, poems could be long or short, in either way I enjoyed reading it, its sad but great