Everlasting Song

No, you aren't seeing double. This is another Glee-inspired song, you can call it a fanfic. This time, it's about Finn's feelings for Rachel...

Everlasting Song

Like the pages of an empty book

Just staring back listlessly

I really thought I had it all

And you were just another girl to me

Hiding from the world, all my true hopes

'Cause I never really dared to dream

Trying to live up to everybody else

Only I know I can achieve

And you dream of how you can change the world

But girl, you've already changed mine

As the gentle tune of your melody

Soothes my heart every time

And I see the stars deep in your eyes

Through the darkness, how it shines

And I can't seem to find any peace so far

But now I know where it lies

It's just us against the world, alone

But I'll never stop singing on

'Cause I've found now what I've been missing

Through the night, though it's still so far, the dawn

I swear that I'll sing forever on

'Cause I know that you'll be listening

And though the music stops, the fire still burns on

'Cause these are the words 

Of my everlasting song

Like a riddle for every time and place

My questions still echo on

In the chasm, in the empty space

Of my heart, where you'll sing along

And I had the dream you had as well

Just didn't dare to make it real

As I stayed and moved along with the flow

They never cared about the way I feel

And I see the light shine in your eyes

As you sing right from your soul

As bright as the sun in the deep blue skies

As our story begins to unfold

It's just us against the world, alone

But I'll never stop singing on

'Cause I've found now what I've been missing

Through the night, though it's still so far, the dawn

I swear that I'll sing forever on

'Cause I know that you'll be listening

And though the music stops, the fire still burns on

'Cause these are the words 

Of my everlasting song

One more try, one more song

And we'll fly forevermore

Take this chance, it's now or never

As it's what we're waiting for

So hold me in the silence

When everyone else is gone

And we'll make it someday

Just listen to this song

It's just us against the world, alone

But I'll never stop singing on

'Cause I've found now what I've been missing

Through the night, though it's still so far, the dawn

I swear that I'll sing forever on

'Cause I know that you'll be listening

And though the music stops, the fire still burns on

'Cause these are the words 

Of my everlasting song

Author's Note

Image taken from Wikipedia
Sorry if it's long...
I was just thinking, "What if Finn wrote his confession about his feelings in a song? How would it go?' And I came up with this...

Reviews

[poetic soul]

take this chance...its now or never!!!
the best part of the whole poem...wish we all could understand this in love and elsewhere too...there would be less regrets and more happiness around!!
really...a very "pretty" song this is...i enjoyed reading it...

[JENY]

A beautiful song…..
That exudes pure love….
That has a touch of sanctity of thought….
Pervading….all around
Through the words and lines…
their apt arrangements….and repetitions
excellent creation…

[Natalie]

This was incredible. I really like glee too and this was so deep I loved it. I read a lot of your poems though I haven't commented on many and your work blows me away. Great job!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

quite the smooth declaration~ has the pure rhythms of a song~ I can imagine it sung soft and acoustic~well done~

[Drake]

Nice!

[ghost writer]

stop being a gleek. haha. good attempt.

[TopHatGirl]

YEAHHHHHHHHHH!!! Another glee fan! *hugs you so hard it hurts*

Ha..ha.. Sorry a lot of my friends hate that show. So I love it when I find another gLeek.

Anyways, on to the actual reviewing!

' I swear that I'll sing forever on' --My favorite line. Don't know why. Probably the 'forever on' part. This flows so perfectly, it makes my heart ache. And you could imagine this being sung as well. I like the rhyming pattern in this one, less choppy then most I've seen. I really didn't mind the length, because of how it's done. And I honestly wish I could critisize you on one thing, because I'm mean, but I don't see any flaws.

Fantastic work, fellow Gleek.

[PaperHearts]

Aww, this was a really cute poem! I thought that you did a fantastic job in capturing Finn's voice, and expressing his thoughts through this write. You had a great sense of flow, and I didn't think that the rhyming detracted from that at all, which was actually one of my concerns when I started reading the piece. Being a major Gleek, I loved the fact that this was a fanfic, although looking back, I guess this could be relevant for many other people out there. :)
~PaperHearts