Your Song Part 1

A song/poem dedicated to all who reads this...

Your Song Part 1

Place the pen down, write in the darkest ink

Trying to concentrate, but I just can't think

About what to do and how to say sorry

So I wrote this one for you

When the night falls, I watch the distant stars

Hope they'll guide me to wherever you are

'Cause I've been gone, it's been so long

But I swear I'll always stay true

'Cause I know you won't forgive me

For all that I've done

You know I'm not the same

And also what I've become

So listen to this, wherever you may be

Like how we watched the sunsets, you and me

Think of all the happy days

When I'm just too far away

But I still see the sky in your eyes

And I'm sorry for all I've put you through

'Cause the reason this song was made is you

And I'm taking back all my twisted lies

And I'll hold you close as the skies turn ever blue

'Cause it's just me and you

Reviews

[Linear]

Thank you, you made me cry, you sounded like a girl I once knew.

[SpokenWord]

I see songs as poetry so this is one in the same to me... I have to wish you luck on being forgiven usually twisted lies leads to a lonely heart. I can feel the regret and the hopeful feelings. this was a wonderful write.

[CompellingComposer]

Beautifully sweet :) Spectacular!

[Marie Harrison]

Lovely song. I love it!

[A.Lee]

"When the night falls, I watch the distant stars
Hope they'll guide me to wherever you are"

That's beautiful... Especially that line. Great work, as always.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Great hit..!!!!

[trainwreck]

Fairly awesome, as always.

[Early November]

This hit too close to home. Still, it needs to be a hell of poem/song to affect me that much. A great one. I'm about to read part 2 now.

Though when you say it's a song as well, do you mean that you've done the instrumental parts of it?

[Sasha]

hey great poem man, i can see this more as a song though. the flow of it has that touch.
the way you're rhymed the words is interesting too.

[?]

Emotional, heartwarming, confessional, and so softly spoken.
Loved cant wait to read the second part