The U.N.F.O.R.G.I.V.E.N. 2

A acrostic poem inspired by Metallica's song "The Unforgiven II". Note the references to the song in the poem. Hope you like it!

The U.N.F.O.R.G.I.V.E.N.2

Under the wicked skies you lie with me. 

Nothing left of the sun, nothing left to see. 

Forever wondering if you loved me too. 

Or whether you're like me, you're unforgiven too.

Reading the book of my life that you hold, 

Going page by page, but nothing left to show. 

I stand alone, as I've always done for so long. 

Vulnerable, helpless, wishing you'll be there when I'm gone. 

Embedding this key deep down in you. 

Now you're like me, you're unforgiven too.

2day the world's dark, clouded by what I've done. 

 

 

Author's Note

Image taken from Wikipedia

Reviews

[A.Lee]

"I stand alone, as I've always done for so long.
Vulnerable, helpless, wishing you'll be there when I'm gone. "

I love those two lines. Great work.

[OT]

I like this one too!! it's deeper than the first one I think, well written as always!!! very nice!

[Bandgeek]

wow that is deep i could never write anything that deep

[HopelesslyDevoted]

also true.... this is really good.

[Marie Harrison]

Love Metallica. Very creative poem. Nice job.

[KAREN]

This is so good! Love the flow and the meaning of this poem, well done!

[G. K. Bostic]

I like this even more than the first one.. You have two lines that seem to read a little too long to me... "I stand alone, as I've always done for so long.
Vulnerable, helpless, wishing you'll be there when I'm gone." I thought they might read better as, "I stand alone, as I've done for so long.
Vulnerable, helpless, hoping you're there when I'm gone." I don't know....just a thought. Great job!

[Andrainea Silverlite]

Going in my favorites!

[Ice QueenJen]

another good one, yet this one is very moving!

[akapr17other]

Again, really cool format. I like how you stuck the 2 in there.