Shattered Part 1

The first part of my rap about child abuse. I know the "live happily ever after" part of life would never happen in our life, but I still can't believe that something like this can happen in the family, whether it's caused by drugs, gambling or anything e

 Shattered Part 1

 

The skies are blue but for her it’s all gray

‘Cos you’re down here wasting her life away

And she’s in front of me, I’m looking in her eyes

Reflects every single one of your endless lies

Say that she’s bad, say that she’s wrong

Hiding the truth from her all along

What did she do to be punished like this?

Plunging deep into a dark abyss

Falling, falling, hit the ground

She tries to scream but she can’t make a sound

Cringing in fear, she grabs her pillow tight

‘Cos you wish she would just disappear from sight

 

No

They don’t know what it’s like to be like this

Shattered all over again

Take

Take my hand as I reach out to you

Being out in the endless rain

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Fallen Angel]

good write!

[Hippy]

i like it but dislike the repeating of take in this peice i understand how repeating a word can make a peice stronger but i feel it weakens it here

[black.butterfly]

that is so sad. good work.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I feel as though I have witnessed the birth of a hero. I really liked the part about..
The "eyes".."Reflect[ing] endless lies". Thats a perfect way to say it all. Its sad to see a person hurt and regurgitating the lies of the person who hurt them so. There are a lot of nice details in this poem. Good work.

[Jasmine]

so sad and disturbing, given the subject matter - but very well-written nonetheless. keep it up :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. A intense story. I like the feel and the struggle in your words. Ending was perfect. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Frantzuu]

Great poem, great details, all I have to say is keep on writing. you have talent :D

[MissWordSmith]

that was... my god that was a brilliant write. you really grabbed my heart out. literally. fantastic, the way you touch emotions, i've always said.

[A.Lee]

Wow... that almost made me cry... So well written and so emotional. Great imagery and word choice. Love it.

[Sseoni]

Wow! What a deep and emotional poem! It moved me and tugged at my heart. A sad poem, but beautiful as well. Wonderful use of vocabulary and great imagery! :D