Darkened Room

A song/poem about a criminal regretting his actions.

 

Darkened Room

Can you change all that you said?

‘Cos there’s nothing I can do

And all my hope is dead

Look back at what I’ve lost

Nothing’s complete

 

Can you fix all that I frayed?

‘Cos there’s only bitterness inside

And nothing’s going right again

Look back at the forming frost

Just let me bleed

 

For my own life

For me and you

Let it all never be said again

‘Cos I just can’t break all the chains

 

Over the darkened room

I feel the wounds I caused you

All the wrong I’ve done

Gonna start anew

Over the shining moon

The only light I can ever find

And now I know

I’ve finally made up my mind

So I’ll let go of the past

In this darkened room at last

 

I know I deserve more than this

And girl, I don’t deserve your kiss

Think back to a time too far gone

Nothing’s all right

 

I know how I screwed things all up

But now I know just how to make it all up

Think back to the night when we met

Before the light

 

For the last time

To make it through

Wonder if you’ll take me back again

‘Cos I just can’t erase the pain

 

Over the darkened room

I feel the wounds I caused you

All the wrong I’ve done

Gonna start anew

Over the shining moon

The only light I can ever find

And now I know

I’ve finally made up my mind

So I’ll let go of the past

In this darkened room at last

 

See what I’ve done

Now that I’m gone

Do you welcome me back

When I come home

 

Waiting all alone

In this darkened room

Staring at the night

At the shining moon

 

Will you still take me back?

Will you still take me back?

Will you still take me back?

Reviews

[Kimberly]

I like this. I'd like to know, also, what sort of music you're thinking of using behind it? I think it would work for a number of different genres. Good write. Thanks for sharing.

[Drake]

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[Charles]

This works well as lyrics for a song. It's hard to judge such things without hearing the music, but the flow and beat seem to be built in, don't they? God effort.

[WriterSki7]

A most unique poem to be sure.
Good piece of perspective, but you already knew that.

[James Watts]

I agree with Cattie. I have lost everything lol, so I know. Excellent write and thank you for sharing.

[A.Lee]

"Over the darkened room
I feel the wounds I caused you
All the wrong I’ve done
Gonna start anew
Over the shining moon
The only light I can ever find"

Nice work. When you're in a situation like that, when you lose everything, is when you start to think.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. The flow and story was amazing. The internal battle to find the right place to be is strong in your words. I like the repetition at the end. A outstanding poem.

[Ruth]

Reflective
Hauntingly so!
So many emotions questioned here, great poem!
xx

[zombiikillah666]

great piece.
i liked this (:

[Simple_mee]

Great job. Flows very easily & is certainly a straight-from-the-heart write :)
There are things which cud have been made better with a bit more of expressions but all in all, i enjoyed it :)