If Only You Knew

Another song/poem. About when you like someone but just can't find the words...

 

If Only You Knew

 

I’m watching you talk

I’m watching you laugh

And your smile’s so sweet

Walking down my empty path

 

As I look from my window

I’m watching you with him

Do you know how much

It tears me up from within?

 

And as you smile back at me

I see the sorrow in your eyes

And I don’t know

How to make you come around

 

If only you knew

How I feel about you

All the songs that I wrote

All dedicated to you

Your smile and your eyes

They’re haunting my dreams

But you’re so far away

Or so it seems

And I wonder

What would you do?

If only you knew

 

You know you’re so hot

You know you’re so smart

But do you know you’ll be

Forever in my heart

 

Your voice whispers in the wind

As you stare far out to sea

Wonder if you’d ever

Come and set me free

 

But as you smile back at me

I see the sadness in your eyes

And I don’t know

How to make you come around

 

If only you knew

How I feel about you

All the songs that I wrote

All dedicated to you

Your smile and your eyes

They’re haunting my dreams

But you’re so far away

Or so it seems

And I wonder

What would you do?

If only you knew

 

I watch the candle flicker out

And I just don’t know what to do

And I just want to know

How to make you come around

 

If only you knew

How I feel about you

All the songs that I wrote

All dedicated to you

Your smile and your eyes

They’re haunting my dreams

But you’re so far away

Or so it seems

And I wonder

What would you do?

If only you knew

Reviews

[Charles]

Good song lyrics. Nice even flow with no line distortions to force rhymes. Good
overall effect. I wonder about 'you'd' in the 6th stanza - should it be you'll, same as the you'll in the 5th stanza? Nice work.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is a story of true love. The feelings inside are expressed with a genuine
emotion. You really wrote a tear jerker here. Your poetry feels like reading
memoirs. You connect very easily with the reader and you have the talent
of a natural lyricist.

[A.Lee]

This is very touching. Such a heartfelt piece. Again, i could definitely see this put to a melody. Nice work.

[Senseless whatever]

This is a very good write. Personal observation, personal longing and emotional pain, confusion all come through. Great job.

[zombiikillah666]

awh. this is wonderful and others can relate. (: great write! :D

[a_mystery]

great song.. reflected your feelings.. i can relate it easily to my my own personal experiences..

[MissWordSmith]

this again is wonderful and just beautiful. i am really touched by this one.
i mean, i don't know what kind of person you are in real life, but the one I see in your work is just amazing.
keep up the great work, as usual. its always a joy to read your writing.

[Ruth]

This is wonderfully written sweety, it is hard to observe from a distance! xx

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is very good. I like the feel and movement in your words. Sometime we must reach out and see what may happen. Better to be sad then wishing for things left behind. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Kelly]

Wow.. This is amazing. So simple to get caught up in the words if you've had this happen to you.