If Only You Knew

Another song/poem. About when you like someone but just can't find the words...

 

If Only You Knew

 

I’m watching you talk

I’m watching you laugh

And your smile’s so sweet

Walking down my empty path

 

As I look from my window

I’m watching you with him

Do you know how much

It tears me up from within?

 

And as you smile back at me

I see the sorrow in your eyes

And I don’t know

How to make you come around

 

If only you knew

How I feel about you

All the songs that I wrote

All dedicated to you

Your smile and your eyes

They’re haunting my dreams

But you’re so far away

Or so it seems

And I wonder

What would you do?

If only you knew

 

You know you’re so hot

You know you’re so smart

But do you know you’ll be

Forever in my heart

 

Your voice whispers in the wind

As you stare far out to sea

Wonder if you’d ever

Come and set me free

 

But as you smile back at me

I see the sadness in your eyes

And I don’t know

How to make you come around

 

If only you knew

How I feel about you

All the songs that I wrote

All dedicated to you

Your smile and your eyes

They’re haunting my dreams

But you’re so far away

Or so it seems

And I wonder

What would you do?

If only you knew

 

I watch the candle flicker out

And I just don’t know what to do

And I just want to know

How to make you come around

 

If only you knew

How I feel about you

All the songs that I wrote

All dedicated to you

Your smile and your eyes

They’re haunting my dreams

But you’re so far away

Or so it seems

And I wonder

What would you do?

If only you knew

Reviews

[Drake]

piano

[Jasmine]

these are great - i generally imagine your stuff as lyrics to a song - they'd fit really well! only lines i don't like "You know you're so hot, You know you're so smart" - not quite as flowing as the rest of the poem.
keep up the great work! :-)

[Holly]

it's kind of sad. =(

[GunMetal]

You can do much with these words. Good job.

[ghost writer]

gripping stuff!!!

[Simple_mee]

Great read. The ending is just perfect. :)

[Jaded rose]

I know this feeling and this was a very good description of that feeling. Thank you for sharing this with me.

[indieRokker]

This is adorably amazing (: the flow, the words, all fall in line together. I must agree a lot of at a point in life will feel like this, it's hard admiring from a distance, wanting them to know, yet scared of the outcome, scared of the unknown yet wanting them to know. The feelings mutual, we all feel it, makes me wonder what would they do, if they only knew. Very lyrical.

keep writing, always
indie♥

[aedaba]

Wow niice... I could totally relate while I was reading it...to me it seems like she's wanting to be with you/the person haha, but might be confused

[WriterSki7]

A tune to the rhythm of a heart in love. Good flow, nice rhyme but I can't really get in touch with a rhythm here. Albeit few poems do have rythm in a song it is necessary. In the aspect of poetry this is a poem nicely done.