The Last Petal Falls

It's actually a song, that's why there's a chorus. About death and how I feel about it.

 

The Last Petal Falls

 

The moon is shining bright

As I stare into the

Blackened, deep,

Emptiness of night

 

But you’re not here now

As I think of how and

What I was

Supposed to have done

 

Just standing on the brink

Watching you from far below

And I know you’re up there

And you’re never coming back anymore

 

Standing on the edge of the grave

At the edge of the world

Where you lie now, my girl

How I wish I could have saved you

Pulled you back from the dead

Just another of the things spinning round

In my head

And here I am on the edge of the town

As the last petal comes falling down

Can’t control myself

As I spiral into the

Silent, bleakness,

Emptiness in my head

 

Now you’re just too far away

And I think of how and

Why did I

Do nothing to help you

 

Just watching from my room

Pray to God the pain will go away

As I watched you pass on

But no one was ever here to stay

 

Standing on the edge of the grave

At the edge of the world

Where you lie now, my girl

How I wish I could have saved you

Pulled you back from the dead

Just another of the things spinning round

In my head

And here I am on the edge of the town

As the last petal comes falling down

 

Remembering you again

Brings back all the things

That make us who we are

 

Through all the grief and disdain

Broken hearts and shattered rings

As we watched the falling stars

 

And as I’m clutching the rose in my hands

 

Standing on the edge of the grave

At the edge of the world

Where you lie now, my girl

How I wish I could have saved you

Pulled you back from the dead

Just another of the things spinning round

In my head

And here I am on the edge of the town

As the last petal comes falling down

 

As the last petal falls

Author's Note

Dedicated to all who have lost someone, be it friends, family or even lovers.

Reviews

Brilliant capturing of emotion. I love the chorus, the title, "the last petal falls" is quite an original line, I think of dying flowers and how time is up for someone.
Regretful, remorseful, sad.
When I think of death, it scares me. I think, how can we die, we have lives, how could you just suddenly not be there?

[KAREN]

it's hard to loose a friend or family member! you wrote this alot of feeling!

[akapr17other]

beautiful. great job.

[Linear]

As the last petal comes falling down,
when it finally lands and cracks open the ground,
and all the people just stand around, yet you my love are buried far underground,
and the last petal falls.

Great poem/song

[Marie Harrison]

Ah...what a dream-like poem. This brings me peace and comfort when I read it. I'm still struggling and mourning the loss of my little dog. I know he wasn't a human but he meant a lot to me. Your poem was a comforting salve to my wound. Thank you for sharing.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

simply stunning, this is probably the best one yet that i have read of yours

[Valentine]

This is like a song of deep sadness...makes me think of my sister-in-law and how I wrote poems of her loss..sad to lose a loved one..Loved your write..Valentien

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Totally agree with Phalen Schuyler!

[Bridget Mcmaken]

This is a very sad and good write. Your words are very powerful, the flow of it is wonderful. I find this poem breath taking, I love it.

[OT]

Brilliantly written as with all of your stuff, its very lyrical at parts with the repetition of the stanza making it chorus like, reinforcing the image and making the overall effect pretty strong! Very endearing write with such subtle delicacy in the way you phrase things and structure the poem! nice read!!

[Cynthia]

Outstanding! Nice written, and strong plus powerful write!