Rise, no shine

a recurring scenario in the City by the Bay

She opens the curtains

Revealing the loveless existence

HIding behind shapeless smiles and routine pleasantries

She serves him

Hiding the desperation for reassurance

Silently pleading to be touched

To be longed for

To be spoken to

Memories abound of endless soft spoken secrets

Comfort in the confines of insatiable desire

Behind the closed door of a disengaged farewell

Resentful silence precedes the tears

A heart in need of mending, yet broken beyond repair

Seeking consolation 

Left in despair

A lit cigarette

Watching life down below

Any measure of forethought would surely provide escape

But to what ends?

The pier is as far as she'd get

What a fool

No promise of tomorrow renders hopelessness

lies create false security

Misguided to the point of madness

Terms of endearment untrue

Somehow it feeds the emptiness

Author's Note

comments? criticisms?

Reviews

[Bare trees]

Your pain rips at the heart of the reader. There is such sadness in the lines as though each were written in tears. In most cases, someone about now usually comes up with the old cliche-things will get better, they always do. I think things only get better when we do. And that takes hard decisions sometimes. It's like being trapped with no light to go by. I can only say I hope you find a light that sheds answers to what you're looking for. Good poem from the heart.

[Sami Khalil]

"Silently pleading to be touched
To be longed for
To be spoken to
Memories abound of endless soft spoken secrets
Comfort in the confines of insatiable desire"

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem told a sad story. Sometime we are prisoners in our own existence. The poem left the reader with a sad vision of someone wanting to be elsewhere. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[KAREN]

Oh, my, such sorrow in this write. The pain cuts through the reader. Your words are filled with despair. I hope time will heal the deep wounds of this life.

[The Nude Writer]

Such a true story.. The desire and hurt so many of us know.

[Melissa Frost]

I can only hope that someday the pain I experienced in that relationship will be useful to me.
read moreI can only hope that someday the pain I experienced in that relationship will be useful to me.
I thank you for reading it.

[Sami Khalil]

A deep and powerful write. Muchly enjoyed...:)..............

[Melissa Frost]

Thank you for reading, Sami :-)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).....................

[Maya Storm]

Fav. lines: "HIding (Hiding) behind shapeless smiles and routine pleasantries..." "Behind the closed door of a disengaged farewell..."

The words you write seems to be well thought out. I feel them as I read. It feels like a true story being told. A very emotionally taxing but good read.

[Antonio Valentino]

enjoyed this.. some pretty terrific writing.. sad story.. thank you for sharing it with us..

Antonio :)

[Vartul]

You remind me of a friend who wrote as beautifully as you do. This is lovely. There is no explicit description, but small imaginative phrases help the imagery spring of itself. It may not be intentional, but it is a gift. Little details create an ethereal image. Wow.

[Eagle Cruagh]

Somehow it feeds the emptiness.
I sit in a chair and conteplate her problem.
She looks off into the distance and asks herself,
""What did I want, what were my needs, that would
result in a dull morning,no man and a vacant room.
I must have wanted the wrong thing. I looked for and
wanted love, but I settled for --- you know--- and it led
to this .
I could have had a nice friend who looks at me with joy
in his heart, with admiration and desire, instead I hve
just a memory.
I think thats what this is about and its sad.
Your writing is gifted and beautiful, but it will lead
nowhere unless you move up in society.
Good luck and Gpd bless,
----- John

[UnOrThOdOx]

This is really....deep....and...sad....D: It makes me....wanna cry...I can feel the emotion you put off, and it's like one of those things that you want yet fear at the same time. I want to keep reading on and I want to feel the pain you felt. It helps me better understand what you feel. I loved it. :D Thanks for sharing. (=