Give and Take

Sorry it's really short

What do you do

When everyone wants you to live

Except for you

Give me what I want and need

Just a simple love

For now, my heart will just bleed

What can you do

When the person who wants you dead

Is no one other than you?

Reviews

[Ees]

I like it. It doesn't matter that it is short! It is powerful. Often times things have more meaning when they are shorter/simpler and not bogged down with too much excess.

I think it is very solid and there isn't much to critique because you have done a very good job of eloquently getting your thoughts across.

I view the whole thing as a question though. I wonder what you would think of adding a question mark at the end of the last line. It would be too much to be put at the end of every question, but it might be a nice way of summing up what you have written.

[MusicJunkie]

Thank you very much. That is actually a good suggestion, I couldn't decide if I wanted it or not, but I will add it now.