The Man I Couldnt Trust

Rusty bars and chainmail suits, my knight in shining armour,

His golden hair flows in waves, he's a real charmer,

He rides on his horse, waving his goodbyes,

His spirits as high as a buzzard flies,

Thinking no worries,

He was beautiful, throwing pennies,

I caught them, and he smiled,

His eyes shined, like a new born child,

I smiled to myself, this was a good sign,

This man was of beautiful design,

I thought he loved me,

Now, to my heart, he will never find the key.

Author's Note

Hope you like it! I literally went a mile to write it.

Reviews

[xDalliance]

This is an amazing poem. The rhyming is perfect and the story is smooth and seamless. The plot is interesting just with the right hint of a twist in the end. I've never read such a perfect poem. Considering you're a year younger to me, I'd have to say you're better writer than me! Looks like you have a new fan here, Kitty! Well done sweety, keep it up! :)

[KittyVenus]

oh, im not a better writer than anyone... I just have good inspiration! I found a beautiful little river, I love to go there and write! XD thanks!!!

[Aptitudex]

very nice poem :) i'm really bad at writing as you know, so maybe i should go down to this "little" river? get some of your talented ideas perhaps, because it obviously seems to work!

[Simran Kewlani]

Wow! This is amazing. The plot of the poem is amazing. The way you have rhymed the poem, makes it so beautiful and catchy. Love it. (:

[gothickid12]

i love it lovley poem good title

[Kalen Luciano]

Well written. I like the poem, but it does leave more questions. I think the questioning does add to the charm though.

[KittyVenus]

Thanks! XD

[KittyVenus]

i have been wondering for a while, what are the questions?

[Bright Ocean Star]

It's really good, but it leaves more questions than answers. You could have made it longer to fill in the blanks, but maybe that's part of the charm...it keeps us guessing and wondering long after it's over.
Very well written! Good job!

[KittyVenus]

Thanks, this means a lot! XD