Love Forever

I cant live anymore,

The world is such a bore,

Slitting my throat,

This is what I wrote,

Death has no meaning,

The cuts and scabs are bleeding,

Blood dripping to the floor,

Why do we think about this great war?

Old existence,

I don't mean to criticize your resistance,

The suicide plan,

In the coexistence of man,

Curdling gore,

And what else more,

This is love,

Like a mourning dove,

Flying through the sky,

Who knows why?

Reviews

[xDalliance]

Hmm.. Interesting concept of writing it while you are dying. The words just flow like silk and the rhyming is flawless. Yet, I think.. Um, it's too much of a dark plot. I understand that you are what you are and I'm not asking you to change that, but if the reader gets a bit of a upheaval from the dark mood, if only a line or two, could change the entire look of the poem. It could keep the reader hooked on. Not like this amazing poem dosen't, but it this already brilliant poem could become a masterpiece. Yet, it 's all up to you! I loved the poem though, no doubt in that! Keep it up! :)

[KittyVenus]

thanks, that really helps, im glad you liked it!

[xDalliance]

Your welcome! :)

[Saddam]

This is love,
Like a mourning dove,
Flying through the sky,
Who knows why?

Your poetry remind me my own old days. I was a speaker on this subject. But soon days spend like sand in hand. I had mentioned that in my poem CAN LOVE HAPPEN TWICE, you can read my experiance there.
Love your write dear.

[Simran Kewlani]

Amazing! this poem is beautifully written. Keep it up kid. (: