I Just Am

"I just want to be free, and when I can, I will."

I do not believe in right or in wrong,

I do not believe in Hell or in God,

Sometimes I think that a lie can do good.

I just am.

I do not trust the rich or the rats,

I do not think that right's always right,

I do not always hold the door for the old,

I just am.

I do not believe that smoking will kill,

I do not believe that you love me still,

I do not have trouble sleeping at night,

I just am.

I do not trust the light or the eve,

I believe in our right to just not believe

I do not believe you should force it on me,

I just am.

I believe in the free and the sad,

I believe that people don't mix,

I believe in the many and few,

I just am.

Author's Note

Hopefully you will interpret this as it was meant, but you'll have to figure that one out yourselves...

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

Well there ya go, naked no bs existential p.o.v., with just the barest hint of Dr. Seuss whimsy ("Sam I am").

Indeed, I am always pointing up the flimsiness of ANY sort of belief (loose stone in stream analogy), (un)common sense in a persistently medieval world of warring beliefs implemented by hardcore weapons made possible by ratiocination.

"I believe in the free and the sad,/I believe that people don't mix,/I believe in the many and few,/I just am."

You did aver belief there, tho' of the softer ilk (don't put all your weight on that loose stone). Toss up, that. Tho' good provisional use of "believe" (if one must), I probably would have preferred burying that word entirely.

I'm reminded of John Lennon's "I don't believe in Beatles" and all the rest, but he did say "I believe in you."

Is it a belief to say I prefer the virtual annihilation of the words "believe" and "belief" as affirmations? ;-)

My two cents, or farthings, what-not. Good work.

[UnsettledStyle]

I have the feeling that this was not a progressively thought out poem. Which is not bad, don't hate me just yet. But dashing out a poem always leaves you open to minor mistakes. Namely, the line "I do not think that right is always right" doesn't mesh well with the rest of the stanza. The use of repetition offsets the rhythym just enough to make it feel awkward.

But the actual content is pretty sweet. I actually need to dig out a poem I wrote that deals with the frustration of trying to quit smoking, I think you would enjoy it. Atheism is always fun to despair about, as is lacking faith in society.

The poem is nice, be happy with it.

[deeps]

I really like this write.
Accept me or accept me not write.
Love it

[Drifter]

Not a bad poem at all. Well polished and easy to read. Bravo.

[Michael London]

I really, really, liked this a lot, a lot, good job! this is great :]