The language of love

when people are in love, they become blind and goes to the extreme of risking their lives. This is about how someone describes her lover.

Thy eyes, the moon dims.
Thou speaks and it sounds like music
Thy voice so soothing like the singing of birds.
Thy hands so soft, like a newly born baby.
Thy lips so sweet, like a freshly baked cake.
Thy eyes sparkles like a shining star.
Thy teeth whiter as a winter snow.
Thy hair looks like a blossom
If age upon me catches, and I sleep forever,
A thousand times I will wish for you,even in the afterlife.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

real love will be with us long after we shuffle off our mortal coils...
some nice similes here.
sixth line i think you meant "eyes sparkle"---

age will catch us all eventually, but how nice it would be to spend that forever sleep with someone we love.
j.