THE TOMORROW ME

This poem is about a call for change in the African continent. Africa in this poem is personified as a mother who is in grief and asking of how her future will be if her children doesn’t listen to her

Abundant in wealth but yet I lack.
Abundant in knowledge but yet I hide
My wealth are been amassed to strange lands
My youths are engaged in corrupt practices
My future leader, today, are present day corrupters
My politicians are selfish and incompetent
My children fights each other without any reason
How can I live if these things keep going on?
How will my tomorrow be?
Oh!my children, won’t you ever learn?
Independent you claim to be and yet you are still a slave.
Your minds and hearts abroad but your skull at home.
Think not my children, how will my tomorrow be?
As a mother, I cry and call for a change, but my voice my children hear not.
I’m in deep pain, my heart is in sorrow!
But there’s none to comfort me
Arise my children!
Arise and learn!
Children of Africa arise and act!
But if my children hear not my voice,
What will be the tomorrow me?

Reviews

[BlackPrince]

This is a wonderful poem expressing the truth on the contradictory condition of theAfrican continent and its wonderful but confused people. I am an African and I must admit that a change of psychological attitude is needed from ourselves.
We must value ourselves without waiting for validation from foreign lands.
We must daily nurture our natural and instinctive sense of communal solidarity that truly defines us as a people. So many aspects of our lives need to be worked on.
China today is a perfect example of a people collectively determined to succeed by asserting themselves through discipline and work; hence why they gain the respect of the world.

That said, as a fellow writer, I'd advise you to pay careful and conscious attention to the correct grammar and vocabulary. Know the difference between plural and singular, past, present and future tense within a sentence.

Example: ...'My wealth are been amassed',
should be: 'My wealth is being amassed.'
(Present tense).

...'My future leader, today, are present day corrupters.' (This is wrong)

It should correctly be:
' My future leaders, today, are present day corrupters.'

Therefore you need to carefully re-read your poem to correct the many errors.

The overall concept and content and context make this a wonderful poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really like the last line...a lot. and the overall poem has a powerful message much like many of the old Beat poems from the fifties and sixties.
needs some editing, but a necessary write for people to listen to.
j.