Melted

A drabble on summer love and being young and all those other trite, Kodak moments.

The air is ripe, and we bite into it

The sun is warm butter, and we bathe in it

The sidewalk is naked, and so we adorn it

with rainbows, with SKY BLUE, with neapolitan puddles. 

Our hair is wild, and the wind isn't helping

Our hands brush once, and my heart takes off running

Our backs are sweating, and the radio's playing

Bruce Springsteen, Tom Petty, Neil Young.

The waves are salty, and you look like heaven

The sand is scorching, and your smile makes me thirsty

The sky is cloudless, and you just get tanner

while my shoulders turn pink like my cheeks when you kiss them.

I drink too much at your best friend's birthday

I tell you a secret of mine without thinking

I worry for five seconds, stomach starts knotting

but you pull me close and give me your tequila-lime-salty lips.

The exit signs fly by, and your hand's on the gearshift

The night feels alive with a beat, and I need it

The car is our ticket, our suitcase, we've packed it

and we drive all night with our fingers laced up.

We're sunburnt and tired, the bed's an oasis

We're sore and there's sand in a number of places

The TV is on but we watch each other's faces

and you tell me my eyes are mermaid sea-green. 

It's citrus and berry and lemonade-flavored

It's Coppertone and aloe and cheeseburger-scented

It's red, white, and blue and it's firework-colored

and when you talk I can hear the ocean like a shell at my ear. 

And it will come again next year with magic and snapshots

and sunblock for me and a dreamsicle for you. 

Reviews

[SteveB]

You did such a magnificent job of carrying me both to your place and to NY summers 30 years ago. I loved the structure here. It gave the piece, particularly the fifth stanza, a speed to match the mood. The earlier stanzas had a slower pace given the word choices but then as night approached it sped up. Very well done.

[SonOfPlunder]

Such imagery and use of words. Really enjoyed this

[A. Amos]

I was smiling while reading your interesting write, I have to admit this one you really create a very alive poetry!

[MAC]

what a wonderful gem this is....uniquely written with original content. love it!

[Muse]

This was witty and charming. I enjoyed all the clever metaphors and random rhymes. I liked how it read more like a song than it did a poem. I'm thinking this could be the next Taylor Swift hit.

[koty bell]

This poem made me wanna me wanna enjoy the world a little more! Great write!

[Adambomb]

I've been searching on this website for a poem like this since I joined. Beautifully written! Your words remind me of a Lana Del Rey song- dreamy, desirable, and free. Thank you very much.

[sayed Mudasir Ali]

A much to delight and it has elated me in so many ways. There is silence in some of the lines and then afterwards there is this big notions coming out .

[Dr. Wood ?]

quite mesmerising with the rhythm and sway....and beautifully balanced imagery....

[one sky]

Wow! This is breath-taking. Lots of beautiful things happen when you fall in love. Great metaphors well-expressed, nice flow, good word choice, and concept- in general, this is amazing.
Good job!