Dirt Road Stacy

sorry i am not happiness, roses and sunshine

she lives one town over just down route 49

where the sun sets on the tracks

and the odds are pretty stacked

that if you go tonight

i'd bet my wife that there's no coming back 

chase the one it all seems real enough

take my car and turn right off the bluff

hang on there for your new flame

just know i will never be the same

for every lover there is an old lover and a scar

four hundred dollars might just buy you a running car

so hold your breath for eighteen hours through the Midwest

so you can walk in on what shes been doing best.

chase the one it all seems real you know

like you're the only one who has been to mexico

get on the plane its the hardest part

but you wont know pain until it all falls apart.

just down the dirt 

there is just more dirt.

Reviews

[MaximumFlight]

Very beautiful and very abstract in the concept of love and misery of old lovers'.

[Ruth]

There is always dirt to be left behind and some seem to not notice it and just head off into the greener grass, as such, but it's never really that green if they pay attention, visceral piece hon :)

[mercy party]

thank you, much appreciated!

[APOORVA]

interesting start
sorry i am not happiness, roses and sunshine
she lives one town over just down 119
NICE RHYMING


chase the one it all seems real enough
take my car and turn right off the bluff
hang on there for your new flame
just know i will never be the same
MY FAVORITE PORTION, VERY VERY VERY DEEP

[mercy party]

Thank you for your time with it.

[Paul Bell]

This is a great poem. Tells you all you need to need to know. Just the second last line i would change though.

Once you've hit the dirt.
There is just more dirt.

[mercy party]

Thank you for reading and the suggestion. The line however isn't going anywhere. :) I do appreciate the feedback.

[Stacy Purvis]

Such emotion in this one! I had no idea that your name is Stacy!
Strong imagery, a dirt road, no signs, a road less travelled...sounds like an adventure!

[mercy party]

Thank you very much. : )

[Stacy Purvis]

You're welcome, sweetie. Much love and many Blessings xxx

[Kesha]

I loved this piece, so f****n heartwrenching! One suggestion, and only a mild one, the last line "there is just more dirt" in my head it sounds better if it's "there is only more dirt" same meaning but I feel like it flows better. Again only a mild suggestion that you dont even have to listen to lol. Either way, great piece here!

[mercy party]

i appreciate the suggestion. Thanks for the great review? : )

[mercy party]

the question mark was a typo*

[Kesha]

Lol you are welcome :)

[Papaya]

MP, this was great but those last two lines... super.
People fall in love with what's on the surface initially but when they leave one partner for another they realize all relationships have dirt. This is what those lines made me think of.

[mercy party]

Thank you for mentioning the last two lines, the intention of them was just that. :)

[Papaya]

You're welcome. This one is good.

[MsJewel]

So many great lines in this well written poem. Truly a pleasure to read! :) Julie

[mercy party]

Thank you so much Julie, I do appreciate that.

[Giulia King]

I love the flow on this one.
"for every lover there is an old lover and a scar" So true!

[mercy party]

I appreciate that!
Thank you

[BBP]

Pssshhh, talk about Johnny Cash wanting a song. I could see it. (and the answer is yes, I am, but I still know what Im talking about) lol

[mercy party]

I wont argue with that. Thank you, you are very kind! lol

[BBP]

Just telling it how it is! :)