for what you've done

#11

The fire has burned

don't call for me. 

when you said that it was nothing

i was finally at ease

i've been accepting apologies you never gave

i cant help you when there's nothing left to save

i hit the road to where 

that i cant share

i suppose it's just because i didn't see it as a blessing 

as you brushed me off 

like a love long lost.

its not you its me

well obviously

you cant imagine life without me, 

well its your lucky day 

it looks like you wont have to,

i have been junked and put away

as you brushed me off

like a love long lost

and when that moment came

i sure hope you found a way

to find forgiveness-

in your heart 

for what you've done

and all that has been lost for lust

all the sorrys

and the double sorrys 

there is a cost

for what you've done

Reviews

[Papaya]

My first thought was that I finally found one I hadn't reviewed. My second thought was, this poor person has handed over his heart to someone who is either very selfish or has not reached the emotional maturity required for a commitment. It's difficult to be on the receiving end of that...

[mercy party]

thank you for that, really. :)

[B]

Being involved with someone that displays inconsistency
well makes one think
there is more than what one sees .... but that's love to care and want someone beyond it all
through all that mess you still love

or you dont

Well done :)

[mercy party]

you've examined it well, again I sure appreciate your take. thank you. :)

[B]

i was blabbering yesterday i hope i am not annoying you

[mercy party]

lol.not even close. i appreciate your time so very much! :)

[B]

I am glad
well thank you
Your avatar reminds me of the British army
i studied that for three years .... quite brutal

[aLittlePain]

Absolutely diggin on this! Some people just don't have what it takes to receive, they're emotionally incapable almost:

'i've been accepting apologies you never gave
i cant help you when there's nothing left to save' really dope lines MP. Good stuff! R xo

[mercy party]

R. Thanks so much for checking it. Your interpretation is on point. much appreciation!

[Jamey]

i've been accepting apologies you never gave
i cant help you when there's nothing left to save

Love love this...well done!

[Lovecraft]

A bitter love story. Like you've been thrown away like garbage when you have outlived your usefulness to her. I feel as though this is a sort of "Swan Song" to someone you loved but perhaps didn't truly love you back despite how much you gave her emotionally, maybe your heart?

A great poem, MP!

[mercy party]

Thank you, more than ever. seeing it interpreted back like that is huge.

[Lovecraft]

When a poem is good I try my best to interpret it correctly. I'm fairly good at interpretations of poetry but sometimes I completely miss the mark. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

its not you its me
well obviously
"you cant imagine life without me,
well its your lucky day
it looks like you wont have to,
i have been junked and put away
as you brushed me off
like a love long lost"

Loved this stanza here! If only people got what they deserved all would be even,.. Nicely penned emotions. A powerful write indeed..

[mercy party]

In the end, it all works how it should. I have no ill will, just a furious pen.
Thank you for giving this a go! much appreciated.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree! And yes ferocity is good ;)
you're welcome :)

[natalie]

Karma...Love...love...love

[mercy party]

Thank you Natalie, so cool!

[Giulia King]

Damn what did she do? This is an interesting poem! It has a nice flow and I love; "as you brushed me off
like a love long lost"

[mercy party]

what she did was inspire me, i am too kind! : )
thanks for the read, Gullia .

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Well said. Nice flow to it too.

"I've been accepting apologies you never gave," great line.

[mercy party]

thank you for your time Cyprian Van Dyke!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome!

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Wow! The flow goes on so perfectly!
Love this alliteration
"like a love long lost"
Powerful theme!
Kudos!

[mercy party]

thank you always Tazeen!