the gentleman

#7

your mistakes they may be bigger than gods plan 

i thought that i'd be good at it so i ran

maybe i should get away from this whole thing 

and just cut my finger off at the ring

this loss of mine can be good 

just go and ask the crook

now you got the upper-hand

to think that i mistook you for a man

once this girl was so dead set

to go to the banquet

so she went

to the boneyard after dark instead

because this other one was hard-pressed

and broken down to pieces, just a guess

chains that bind to you ,you agreed to sell your soul

the deal is done ,lights dim, pain ushered in now

lost and found and broken bound

and shes shaking the keys in your face just out of reach

down the street you can hear a once good man

trying to make some righteous stand 

so she calls the police.

once this girl was so dead set

to go to the banquet

so she went

to the boneyard after dark instead

because this other one was hard-pressed

and broken down to pieces, just a guess

someday you wont even have the desire to dance

and you'll wish you didn't do all this,.

looking back often, wondering, where's your gentleman?

you left him back at the Sundowner Saloon

abandoned and marooned

and all these years you thought were regal,

well its just evil-

what you do.

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

I see a girl so desperate not to be left on the shelf that she forgoes her normal checks and balances in terms of intuition and the 'usual' questions one asks oneself regarding people who enter our lives and who are admitted to the level which houses our all.
She paints a rogue as a gent for expediencey and gets married only to really get to know her husband when they are married and to realise that - not that she was fooled - she fooled herself and is willing to do anything to get out of the relationship.
The imagery is dark and foreboding and stark.
Quite the piece, M.P.

[mercy party]

i do always look forward to your take on this. Thanks man! again very on the mark. you always end up leaving me with something to think on.

[Jimmy Yetts]

A tale of serious moral decline.
First stanza appears to be somewhat political--though the rest of the piece focuses on individuals.
An intriguing and mysterious read!

[mercy party]

Thanks for pointing out the moral decline within this. There is definitely the crumbling of a foundation in that sense. Very cool take!

[Ruth]

An interesting concept here, I enjoyed the raw tone to it and the addressing of it and the possible outcomes, left me intrigued :)

[mercy party]

a concept that just sort of showed up. glad you were intrigued, i appreciate that. Thanks!

[Falcon1]

Fancy writing there swell set my head in a spin, Captured my attention.

[mercy party]

i hope it was a good spin. ty!

[Farhan Shaikh]

That's very interesting read, well penned 😊

[mercy party]

ty, i appreciate it and i did need a smile. : )

[natalie]

Interesting, and very peculiar.. I like it

[mercy party]

i'm glad you like it. this whole series i'm releasing is based off a very peculiar event.

[natalie]

so the rest of the series is on here?

[mercy party]

yeah, its just a series of poems that relate and are sort of in sequence to the happenings.

[natalie]

Oh by the way, how did you stop trying to fight the devil,by yoursself I know I"m doing it wrong.... but still keep on

[mercy party]

realizing the devil is someone else's fight will allow you to walk away and get out clean.

[Nichole]

A good read. But I feel like I need to go back and read the other "installments" :)

[mercy party]

thank you, i'm about to release the next installment tonight, hope you can check it.

[Bala Gorthi]

Interesting and intriguing write. I loved the thought, the story and its style.
Thank you for sharing.

[mercy party]

thank you so much for taking the time with the story.

[wordman]

reads like a life story,one day you will regret

[mercy party]

thanks. and i assure you like life, it gets less unwell by the end.

[Kesha]

A very nice addition to the other acts. I really enjoyed this. Telling the other person that they'll regret the things they've done, nicely penned. I believe my favorite was definitely the opening line, it just drew me right in.

[mercy party]

Thank You for that. i appreciate you following this.

[Kesha]

You are welcome