november resentment

november resentment

A Poem by mercy party
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someday she's gonna look at you and resent
someday, i just cant wait
she's gonna lose it all for you two
and soon decide you're not her fate
you're just a stone kicked down my street
you'll be alone and thrown red meat
and you'll be stuck in a blank stare
and realize that she don't care
you were just a soft landing she was never even planning to use,
so you lose
you know its all been said
and i will respect the dead
like you wouldn't even try 
it took seeing november on the calendar to grasp the year you stole from me,
you stole from her
you're just a blur
my possession is your obsession
and it doesn't work that way,
just because your world is full of gray
and you can throw a dumb cheap slogan and say-
life it just happens
it was never yours anyway 
well i guess that goes both ways.

© 2017 mercy party


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Well written, you exude power throughout the poem. I like that moment you describe... "it took seeing november on the calendar to grasp the year you stole from me"... I can feel that person in that sentence... their pain at the realization of time wasted. Good work. Keep it up.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

7 Years Ago

thanks for your time! realizing the time wasted is sometimes worse than what happened. thanks for di.. read more



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There's the saying "happiness is the best revenge" and then there's this!

I like how it doesn't pull punches. The anger, resentment and betrayal slap the reader in the face.

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you're just a stone kicked down my street

you were just a soft landing she was never even planning to use,
so you lose

I also like the somewhat real warning at the end, that women like that are not steadfast, and her imagination, restlessness and whim will likely carry her from him just as from you.

Least, that's my interpretation of it.

Good stuff.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

7 Years Ago

thanks for the motivational perspective. Your review(s) always help me sort things out in my brain. .. read more
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a desire for revenge...bitterness washes over you in waves. Good poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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mercy party

7 Years Ago

thank you, and thank you!
The bitter resentment is quite palpable, like a thickening fog rolling over you. I like this poem. Sometimes women just use men for their own purposes and/or gain. It's screwed up but true.

Good job, MP! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

7 Years Ago

thanks for checking it out! yes this situation is very "screwy" to say the least. i appreciate it!
Well written, you exude power throughout the poem. I like that moment you describe... "it took seeing november on the calendar to grasp the year you stole from me"... I can feel that person in that sentence... their pain at the realization of time wasted. Good work. Keep it up.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

7 Years Ago

thanks for your time! realizing the time wasted is sometimes worse than what happened. thanks for di.. read more
"you were just a soft landing she was never even planning to use,
so you lose"
These two lines resonated with me and I think put the poem together quite well, for me at least. Somewhat ties together the different emotions present all around the poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


mercy party

7 Years Ago

thank you, i appreciate that!
..She's her problem now???

Posted 7 Years Ago


I was reminded of a song upon reading this one M.P. - it's an oldie called 'Hat's off to Larry'.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Xk_FR3341bA

She's his problem now.
Good write my friend.
:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Mission accomplished M.P.
It was the first thing that came to mind upon reading.
Welco.. read more
mercy party

7 Years Ago

i bet Del took his hat off more than a few times.
Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Haha - I guess so - I hope he wore some kind of protection ;p
Very deep connection it forms..and well written..
my possession is your obsession

and it doesn't work that way,

just because your world is full of gray

and you can throw a dumb cheap slogan and say-

The lined above I liked much

Posted 7 Years Ago


mercy party

7 Years Ago

i'm glad it worked. Thanks for your input and time.
What's different here is that you've time stamped it for the reader which creates a deeper connection. That feeling of being bitter and jilted still very strong. Still an unhealthy desire for revenge.


Posted 7 Years Ago


Papaya

7 Years Ago

I suck at comments, I know...
mercy party

7 Years Ago

...i strongly disagree with that : ).
Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

me too
You are sound at reviews Ana. You put your heart into trying to get to the crux of the.. read more
I really loved this addition to the rest. Nicely written. Very somber indeed.

Posted 7 Years Ago


mercy party

7 Years Ago

thank you for that.

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