1st rule of lying (audio)

https://soundcloud.com/user-318968342/first-rule-of-lying

lost my mind

on the drive

cant get back what is gone

you know i must have put my foot wrong

someone new to be sewn to the stitchings

and i just cant sit here in this house of lost things

so take what you want

you sure can empty a room 

just remember with your regrets

that i can covet too

go back home state your case

going on your way

isnt working 

doing what you want

first rule of lying dont over sell

and never go running back, back to where you fell

things got spotty

and oh so costly

you are history

and im not

as you rail and scream

before the light leaves

i want to hear you say

please dont go ok 

Author's Note

https://soundcloud.com/user-318968342/first-rule-of-lying

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

I'm so glad that I've stumbled upon this gem of a write (lyrical piece.)

It is refreshing to come across something that is more than strictly a poem. wonderful word weaving that brilliantly depicts deception...I adore the lyrical flow and the relatable content.

There are way too many lines too choose from that are my favorites.

Thank you for sharing, I look forward to visiting your art again

[mercy party]

Thank you for those wonderful words, they help so much along the way. I am very appreciative of that. TY!

[Farmgirl]

Oh wow MP... this is very heart wrenching to read ... But I love your imagery here .... I do hope this ia just a fictional piece and not something you are enduring ...

[MaximumFlight]

Amazing job, I was really drawn into this :)

[Ana B.]

Regrets and yearnings that leave us wishing for a different outcome. I love the wisdom behind these lines. Very well done dear author :)

[mercy party]

Thank you so much Ana B. :)

[apennylate]

That ol' school feel, and a wonderful voice, to boot... I enjoyed the rolling tune in this, and the snappy lyrics go right along... Thanks for sharing, and great stuff...!

[mercy party]

hey, thank so much for your kind review. I appreciate the feedback on the song.

[A Soap Mess Stories]

I found that he is confused...as if he doesn't know if he should love or let them go...good write....

[mercy party]

Sometimes you have to take it and leave it i guess. Thanks for reading this.

[Ruth]

Really nice to hear the audio :) I really enjoyed listening, lovely guitar work, the lyrics are most poignant and reflective of the loss and stains left over, brilliant! :)

[mercy party]

Thank you :) i'm so glad you checked this out and gave it a listen. i really do appreciate what you said. :)

[-Batata]

Touching and beautifully written

[mercy party]

thank you for that. I appreciate it.

[wordman]

so you are telling him to go,and you can do the same things as him,but when you leave,don`t come back

[mercy party]

they can go, the request is that they don't go if they are ok. maybe, i don't know what i even mean some times.

[Alessander]

Cool stuff. I really liked "i just cant sit here in this house of lost things".

That struck me most from this piece.

Also, on a somewhat bitterly humorous note

"you sure can empty a room "

Made me grin a bit.

But in spite of all that, the last lines seem to still desire the person, to redeem or love.

Good stuff.

Didn't know you were on soundcloud. So am I! I should prolly put that in my Bio lol

Followed you.

Here's mine. I don't post much there yet though.

https://soundcloud.com/user-528777923

[mercy party]

thanks man. followed you as well.
thanks for checking this out.

[mercy party]

...really good work over there on soundcloud. Your poems are always stellar and they are awesome to hear!

[Stacy Purvis]

Passionate, full of loss and regret, but something else...
Hope.
I love It!
Thank you for sharing!

[mercy party]

thank you, i really appreciate that.

[Stacy Purvis]

:) Still think this is ahhmazing.