love to lose

#2

love to lose

i guess i had a love to lose

one to spare and one to choose

one to hide behind

and one to try to find

i guess i was the one to burn

the one to suffer for the queen

who lit me up, the embers gleam

and even angels cant believe

a heart of stone, a mouth of gin

a rundown town, a harlequin 

strikes a match and begins

i guess i was no match again

i guess i had a love to lose

one to scar and one to bruise

i guess i had a love to write a three chord goodbye song to

and it aint you

once i had a love who said

those days are long over my friend

sadly wise , perhaps it is

i was wrong to imply this

if you stopped i'd take you back

and i don't think that there is anything

so make sure you know that

Reviews

[mou]

a love so simple, gentle warm feelings..sometime get complicated by misfortune. lie,misunderstanding and one sided strong feelings (probably the most painful one)..you have captured a very fine feeling with full of sentiment and emotion..and here your words ignite the heart..just awesome
mou.

[mercy party]

thank you so much mou, for the a really great take on this, i enjoyed the perspective. Thank you!

[mou]

my pleasure :)

[A Soap Mess Stories]

A love lost is a risk we all take when we put ourselves out there...well written..

[miahstr]

Love It!!! I can really feel you in this poem. Lost love is one of the most haunting things I've had to deal with. You do an excellent job here. Keep it up!

[mercy party]

hey thanks man! i hope your dealing with it is done. thanks for reading

[Rachel Richardson]

I don't have the vocabulary to describe exactly what it is that spoke to me about this poem, but I believe it had a lot to do with your meter.
I loved the pulse that your words had.
The repetition reminded me somewhat of-don't be offended, it's a good thing- Dr. Suess. It was very sing-songy but, in spite of that, the somberness of your message shone through. The way the two elements intermingled made for a breath of fresh night air.

[mercy party]

thank you for an amazing review. you are quite a wordsmith yourself. i really appreciate your take on it.

[Rachel Richardson]

I shared this with my girlfriend and she loved it.

[mercy party]

that is just cool! i just posted another one. let me know! : ) :)

[Rachel Richardson]

okay!!!!!!!!

[anon]

Amazing. I loved it. It got in my feels. You go.

[mercy party]

thank you!

[Tate Morgan]

This would be a good lyric for a song . Love always takes as much as it gives my friend

[mercy party]

Does it ever stop taking? something has got to give! i will release the audio version of this after i release it lyrically. there are 10 more to come. Thank you so much!

[mercy party]

when i say audio, i mean song.

[Tate Morgan]

Yeah it stops taking when you meet the right person.However with the right person you tend to give without thought Always take much less than you give then you will know gods favor Or so they say

[mercy party]

absolutely. thanks for the wisdom my friend.

[Tate Morgan]

you are welcome stop by if you get time Im a rhyme and meter poet Very similar to lyrical and set all my works to music

[Papaya]

To me it sounds like the love you lost was not the girl (or guy) but your own love, for them. When someone cheats of disrespects it hurts like hell for a bit but you get over it fast. I think.

[mercy party]

thanks always Papaya for your spin. i like your take on this. Does being in a hurry count for getting over something fast? its always there. Same time tomorrow i will post the next one.