love to lose

#2

love to lose

i guess i had a love to lose

one to spare and one to choose

one to hide behind

and one to try to find

i guess i was the one to burn

the one to suffer for the queen

who lit me up, the embers gleam

and even angels cant believe

a heart of stone, a mouth of gin

a rundown town, a harlequin 

strikes a match and begins

i guess i was no match again

i guess i had a love to lose

one to scar and one to bruise

i guess i had a love to write a three chord goodbye song to

and it aint you

once i had a love who said

those days are long over my friend

sadly wise , perhaps it is

i was wrong to imply this

if you stopped i'd take you back

and i don't think that there is anything

so make sure you know that

Reviews

[mou]

a love so simple, gentle warm feelings..sometime get complicated by misfortune. lie,misunderstanding and one sided strong feelings (probably the most painful one)..you have captured a very fine feeling with full of sentiment and emotion..and here your words ignite the heart..just awesome
mou.

[mercy party]

thank you so much mou, for the a really great take on this, i enjoyed the perspective. Thank you!

[mou]

my pleasure :)

[Bala Gorthi]

I guess I had a love to lose
One to scar and one to bruise..
Very well said Mercy party, love is like that. We get pain, hurt and wounds that take a lot lot of time to heal. Some never heal at all.
A beautiful touching craft. Thank you for sharing..

[CAPOLAVORO]

This one is so soothing to the heart and soul. It is in the middle of torment and confusion. Love it!

[mercy party]

Thank you very much. I do appreciate your words about this.

[Kesha]

I really loved the way this flowed, this was pure genius. It could def be turned into a sort of song with some minor tweaks. So nicely written MP, nicely done :)

[mercy party]

thank you for checking it out, glad you like it!

[Kesha]

you're welcome

[MaximumFlight]

Love is anything but easy; it's messy, painful, agonizing, frustrating, upsetting, and possibly the hardest part of living in general but we can't help but desire, and it's the best/worst thing in the world.

Great job :)

[mercy party]

thank you for that.

[BBP]

A nice flow with some hard hitting fast paced lines. I really liked the words in this one.

i guess i was the one to burn
the one to suffer for the queen
who lit me up, the embers gleam
and even angels cant believe
a heart of stone, a mouth of gin
a rundown town, a harlequin
strikes a match and begins
i guess i was no match again

The toughness in these lines are killer.

[mercy party]

hey thanks, i appreciate that and sorry i missed this! glad you liked this one!

[natalie]

beautifully REAL.....one to scar and one to bruise,

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

alittle Melancholic Very nice flow
of words straight to the point
Raw emotions pain can be inspiring
On all levels of life.


i guess i was the one to burn
the one to suffer for the queen
who lit me up, the embers gleam
and even angels cant believe
a heart of stone, a mouth of gin
a rundown town, a harlequin



Blessings.

[mercy party]

thank you for the blessings. where i am ,i'm afraid luck wont do. thank you.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Well I say that to everyone no matter how much of a battle my life is if it's pain whatever I look on the brighter side of things I'm a very positive soul but very sensitive to others hurt and understand. Have a blessed night take care

[Tony Jordan]

I get the feeling that the speaker dodged the bullet with this one. It isn't/wasn't 'the one' and I think that much was suspected and confirmed.
No blues songs for this loss.
They are reserved for losing 'the one'.

Always the bridesmaid never the bride M.P.

[Ayushi Beura]

Well done...a different kind of thought
I liked reading it
The title is too attractive
Everything is perfect in ur poem i think....enjoyed:)

[mercy party]

Thanks for your words and time. i had contention with this title. I like the double meaning of it. I'm not sure if i love to lose or if i even had one at all. glad you you could enjoy!

[Ayushi Beura]

My pleasure.... :)

[FreedomFighter]

very nice flow throughout the whole poem, keep it up!

[mercy party]

will do. i sure thank you!