love to lose

#2

love to lose

i guess i had a love to lose

one to spare and one to choose

one to hide behind

and one to try to find

i guess i was the one to burn

the one to suffer for the queen

who lit me up, the embers gleam

and even angels cant believe

a heart of stone, a mouth of gin

a rundown town, a harlequin 

strikes a match and begins

i guess i was no match again

i guess i had a love to lose

one to scar and one to bruise

i guess i had a love to write a three chord goodbye song to

and it aint you

once i had a love who said

those days are long over my friend

sadly wise , perhaps it is

i was wrong to imply this

if you stopped i'd take you back

and i don't think that there is anything

so make sure you know that

Reviews

[mou]

a love so simple, gentle warm feelings..sometime get complicated by misfortune. lie,misunderstanding and one sided strong feelings (probably the most painful one)..you have captured a very fine feeling with full of sentiment and emotion..and here your words ignite the heart..just awesome
mou.

[mercy party]

thank you so much mou, for the a really great take on this, i enjoyed the perspective. Thank you!

[mou]

my pleasure :)

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Hey I sure know what it's like to loose love and get it back. thanks for sharing.

[ms. barrie]

remarkable flow, brilliant word play. i love the energy , chaotic cynicism you vividly captured in this piece!

my favorite lines (hard to choose);
are in the third stanza/verse.

-- another amazing write!
-- xx-

[B]

That's thing with love
everything comes out on the table
some wise few
do the sorting
the real, the fake, lies , truth and our own insecurities

love bears it all

A very touching piece !!!

[mercy party]

Thank you so much for your insight and time. Know that i appreciate that!

[Island Hippy]

Again I use the word gritty. I like the pace of this like snapping fingers and again I think this has a lyrical feel. There's a staunch kinda of attitude in your lines as well. Really cool

[mercy party]

i'm glad you sensed the music element of this. I sure do appreciate the kind review.

[Paul Bell]

I think the person who invented hindsight really got it in the neck. I suppose if the wall falls down, you can fix it. But try and go back through time to fix it. You aint doing it.

[mercy party]

Well said. Thanks so much for that review.

[Stacy Purvis]

A little out of rhythm and lengthy in some lines, but still...The raw human emotion we've come to know and love from you. So...Cathartic. 😋

[mercy party]

Thanks for the genuine critique. I will for sure give that some thought, I sure do appreciate that. : )

[Michael G. Smith]

A very gripping and intense piece which catapulted me down memory's lane to ponder my own past loves.

[mercy party]

Nice!
thanks for the review, it is appreciated.

[Ana B.]

I love the ''pastels'' you used for this dear author. Simply marvelous writing! you make the ''soul-break'' sound good in the best way.

[mercy party]

so glad it brought that effect. I thank you so much.

[KeithEBaucum]

I love this. Keep posting great poems.

[mercy party]

thank you much, i sure will try!