lake Michigan (track 1)

https://soundcloud.com/user-318968342/lake-michigan

its gonna be hard for you to steal my love again

when you're sinking to the bottom of lake Michigan

you should have just stuck to the streets 

but instead you stole from me

and the price for that is simple

hence the bricks tied to your feet.

you're an empty hallmark, sentimental, cliche, quote deep message

and i see through the bullshit and your entitlement of preference

go ahead and call it good clean fun

to do what should not be done

the wrath of god is being revealed from heaven

and this one bar town is going to burn like Dresden.

looks like she was turned over to a depraved mind

and i couldn't stand a chance, she's no longer mine

it would take a miracle

you should never dig a hole that you cant get out of clean

last night it was the wrong night or was it the right night and just the wrong person?

anyway you look at it we are in need of some dispersin' .

envy,strife, deceit and malice

ever since you scaled my palace walls

and i just cant wait until i finally get to see you fall 

once and for all. 

Author's Note

https://soundcloud.com/user-318968342/lake-michigan

Reviews

[Alessander]

you're an empty hallmark, sentimental, cliche, quote deep message
and i see through the bullshit and your entitlement of preference

Really felt like this cut through the heart of that person.

So many superficial hallmark hipsters with all style and little substance, or the little substance that is there is programmed to be lured by the typical or twisted.

Nice angry piece.

I think we've all been there, rich, poor, cool, or loser...

I also like the allusion to Dresden for some reason. It captures the utter annihilation

[mercy party]

Thank you! man you nailed it! Thanks for doing me justice with such a fired up review. the empty hallmark was trying to identify the dangers of apparent kindness. Sociopathy 101 if you will. im glad the poem reached you.. i just posted the 2nd poem of the saga.

[BBP]

Still
Love this and the song!

[mercy party]

Thank you again. I appreciate you saying that.

[ms. barrie]

o wow! this is just simply amazing!!! your lyrics are a sword that cuts one deep...leaving one to bleed...and by the context of this ink, rightly so. (and oh so realateable.
compellingly visceral...
stunning//pleasing meter...
spell-binding...one of my fav. writes on here...
-- unable to add more lol...
thank you for sharing -- X

[Ruth]

Wow...this has some serious energy to it, amazingly done mercy party, left me sitting here open mouthed lol I love the power this holds, it literally jumps off the screen at me...

[Richard simpson]

Still great, needs more emotional and sentimental value but it's still great. Good work! *gives you thumbs up*

[mercy party]

Thank you, i appreciate it.

[Stacy Purvis]

Cathartic in nature, angry, passionate...Raw, human emotion! I love this piece very much!
Thank you for sharing.

[mercy party]

Thank you so much. I'm so glad it presented it self that way, I try. Thanks for the encouragement.

[Stacy Purvis]

Always. 😊

[Michael G. Smith]

Wow, they must've really done you wrong. I feel the anger and aguish in each verse. I'm upset you polluted Lake Michigan with them. I grew up in Milwaukee.

[mercy party]

Ha! that's awesome. Lake Michigan is surely full of them. Thanks man.

[Tony Jordan]

An earlier review of mine didn't do this justice M.P.
I loved hearing this being sung in my mind by Kenny Rodgers in the style of 'Ruby - dont take your love to town' - with a tone dripping in dignified bitterness, it's so lyrical.
Bravo M.P.
:)

[mercy party]

Hey Thanks again man! that is such a big time review, you always do me justice and it is much much appreciated.

[MaximumFlight]

I'm not really sure where I can't see some hidden message that either I (1) think can mean two thing or (2) think it's all dark romanticism.

I'm probably wrong, but still, wonderful job.

[mercy party]

Thank you! nothing too cryptic, just, like you said, dark romanticism for sure. The line: entitlement of preference could be discussed as far as meaning. i appreciate your time w this!

[Re-Pete]

wow! i wouldn't want to get on your bad side. powerful hostility. some very strong lines and imagery. title and beginning draw you in and hold right through to the taunting, threatening end.

[mercy party]

oh, its only entertainment, right? Your review is great Pete. thanks so much for reading through the brutality.

[Re-Pete]

Lol. As Al Capone said, "It's only business"...

[mercy party]

"i'm not heartless i just learned how to use my heart less" (Al Capone)

[Re-Pete]

hahaha. :)

[Paul Bell]

I definitely feel this girl has upset you. Just the slight undertones in your poem tell me that. Though doing the river dance with bricks tied to her feet might help. Then again, she sounds like that girl who would float back up and shoot you. Great poem.

[mercy party]

hey thanks! i genuinely smiled from ear to ear when i read the last part of this review! you are so dead on about it. : ) funny!