Little Needles

I can tell you a million lies,

but only if you fall for them.

I can tell you how much it hurts,

but only if you know the pain.

I can give you a million little needles

and stab them into your broken

heart.

I can end your life just like that,

but only if you beg for it again.

Reviews

[Legacy]

Don't Scream Just Yell,

First off I would like to elaborate on the first reviewers comment. This poem is powerful indeed -

The power of your pen is a mighty blade sharp enough to penetrate like butter through life wisdom or anger.

I am not typically fond of this type of format, somehow it works here... The given statement then to follow a bit of an explaination, it is nicely done.

The second to last stanza I love, yet it misses the point with out your follow up, like in the other stanzas. This may be your intention (at which I must say interesting), yet, if not your intention to distract than I surely would like to see your creativity bringforth a line worthy enough to follow.

Beautiful and original, thank you for sharing.

Have a great day,

Legacy

[Moto Kaligawa]

Yea, 'be my victim'. I like it, the strong emotions. We need what we need, and only if the other ha been there too does it make any sense. The truth always hurts, and lies are told to soothe.

Thanks.

[ShadowOfTheDay]

Wow very powerful! I really like this :)