You Are the Moon

If an eclipse were really as amazing as they say,

Then all of lights on earth would turn off

And all eyes on earth would turn onto the sky.

Watching the sun disappear..

As I stand next to you, your eyes flashing red

I think to myself, questions entered my head

What are your words my tongue cannot spit out? 

Only you can say.

Who are you in dark? 

Someone different in the light? 

You are indescribable, totally amazing.

You leave the same impression

Then change a mind at last second.

We all come out, to see twilight's time and 

Their opened eyes, 

showed all the fear inside

Who are you?

I can't perceive.

Not one of them, but a creature in between?

You are every question is the book.

Every answer that does not exist.

You are the wonder in every mind.

You are the struggle in every life.

You are the joy in every smile.

You are the fear in every eye.

You are the impossible

The un-understandable.

Who are you? 

I'm glad I know you. 

You are the sun. 

You are the moon.

 

If an eclipse could give us one taste of chaos,

one taste of luck

It would resemble you.

A death and a life.

The dark and the light.  

Author's Note

This was a poem I wrote about two years ago. I found it while looking through some old papers recently. I don't remember why I wrote this or what the inspiration was or anything like that...I think it was some sort of classroom assignment. Not sure where got this idea from but I really like the poem so to me it doesn't matter. I can tell you though, that the title came from a song called "You Are the Moon" by The Hush Sound. Very emotional song I really love it. Suggest you check it out.

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

As I read this I anticipated more comparisons to the moon, because of the title, but was let down in that respect. having said that, I don't think the title is fitting, especially the poem contains lines such as,
- "You are every question is the book.
Every answer that does not exist."
- "You are the struggle in every life." - I just don't see what these have to do with the moon.

This is just my opinion, a mere mortal's view, so I hope you take it as such :)

Good effort

[lindalou]

I like the contrast of the dark and light, the very balance of life. Thank you, this is easy to read and interesting in concept.

[Ima]

it is magnificent... and i just cant get it out of my head .. its beautiful !!!

[.]

I loved this, especially the second half from 'Who are you? I can't percieve'. wonderfully thoughtful.

a little typo, the first line, should that be 'an eclipse?'

[J.S. Pua]

nice..
good write..
my favorite part:
"If an eclipse could give us one taste of chaos,
one taste of luck
It would resemble you."

[.]

"As I stand next to you, your eyes flashing red
I think to myself, questions entered my head
What are you words my tongue cannot spit out?"

{Creatively expressed lines}

"You are the wonder in every mind.
You are the struggle in every life.
You are the joy in every smile.
You are the fear in every eye.
You are the impossible
The un-understandable.
Who are you?"

{this is great write--i love the questing/torn inside mood-
and the repetition of "Who are you?" is clever-works well}

...Great poetry Natalie...

james:-)

[Pikachu]

wow 2 years ago and it was still good the description the vivid images splendid