Won't Suffer Defeat

And continuously, the daggers stab hard and deep

But I fight to keep moving 

Knowing I will not suffer defeat.

 

And I've seen scars that coat so thick,

Becoming impossible to see any

Skin. 

I have fallen hard and unexpected, 

Lying for hours calling her name. 

 

And many times I have came to the 

Conclusion that my calls have sunk in silence,

So I held out my hand and picked myself up.

 

And for so long I've been trying fight this, 

Becoming weak and watching 

Myself dissolve quickly.

 

And so again I'll ask you to take this.

And so again I'll as you to guide me.

 

And there are weeks were I struggle so hard

To sleep,

But I assume there is water,

Rushing to erode me.

 

And so I pray that you would help me

To keep my head above the water

So that I do not stop breathing.

But I know if come weary

And my soul comes close to dying,

I can lean against your shoulder.

I can lean against your faith. 

Reviews

[SilentDreamer]

I really loved this poem, it just had so much meaning and could be related to so well. It had good flow and just worked out great over all. Great job, keep writing! My favorite line, "And many times I have came to the
Conclusion that my calls have sunk in silence,
So I held out my hand and picked myself up"
Awesome.

[Natalie]

Thank you so much both of you. When some people go through struggles they find that they can't stand at all and we all need someone to help pick us up when we fall. When I write it's like the words know what to say and all I have to do pick up a pen. It flows out of me. Thanks so much for your feedback. Really needed it and you guys so right. :)

[Undying Glory]

wow, really powerful work. just so strong, and i'm sure everyone can take a leaf out of this. these days i find fighting spirit is very undermined, especially with our cynicism and indifference.
And so I pray that you would help me
"To keep my head above the water
So that I do not stop breathing.
But I know if come weary
And my soul comes close to dying,
I can lean against your shoulder.
I can lean against your faith. "
epic words!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem. We must battle and try to go forward. We do need a shoulder and someone to lean on. I like the description and the story in the poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote