Lack Of

I've done my fair share of whining,
Complaining,
Judging and blaming.
I can be happy
And Cheerful,
Or Grumpy
And miserable.
I dream of marrying a country man
And living on some land,
Yet,
I don't know how to skin a deer,
And snake bites are my greatest fear.
I drive a truck that doesn't have four wheel drive
And I couldn't change the oil to save my life,
But going muddying
And horseback riding
Bring me the greatest delight.
I've finished one year of college
But that's it, so far,
And now I'll be working on a ranch
With my two dogs
And a sky filled with stars.
I grew up wanting to be a cowgirl
Wearing bright pink boots
And training my trusty stick-horse,
But life in a growing city
Told me, "being a cowgirl is just a phase."
...now I'm 21,
With the lack of a college graduation,
Famous career,
And
Souvenirs from traveled nations,
...Yet
I'll be living my dream soon;
Working on a ranch
And singing underneath the moon
Saying a prayer
As I take a break at noon,
"Lord thank you for this beautiful life
An adventure
A dream, come true.
Thank you for my lack of perfection, and bless my friends,
My family,
With such lack of perfection too."

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is like your life story in poetic form...I quite liked that. I couldn't help but imagine a country song when I read this; perhaps it was the lyrical nature of the lines. Being a cowgirl is just a phase, huh? Well, I've been riding and showing horses for the last 20 years and I have yet to grow out of the phase, though I wouldn't really call myself a "cowgirl"...my point is that when you find that thing that brings you joy, you'll never "grow out of it". I liked this one imagery wise, and the concept was nice, though there was a lot packed into a relatively short piece...also, perhaps work on evening up the lines a little to improve the flow. Otherwise, I truly enjoyed reading this one!

[Meliss@k]

Thank you so much! I've actually been encouraged to shorten the lines in my poetry quite a bit, but I have a seance of writing that doesn't quite go with what most writers consider "literary appropriate" and that may be part of my lack of perfection... But! I do appreciate every single bit of this review! Thank you so much for reading it AND taking the time to give me some pointers. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

No problem...I get "wordy" as well. Mainly it's just a flow thing; you don't have to shorten the lines, you just have to try to keep them all within a certain syllabic resonance to make it so that the reading isn't "jerky", you know? If you use a short line after a long one, it's best to set it off with a tab so that it is an intentional pause for the reader. Anyway...just my thoughts. Still enjoyed the piece, and I will be reading more of you!

[Meliss@k]

Thank you so much Sarah! :)

[Eagle Cruagh]

Yes, you said it all.
Snakes are my greatest fear. But, beautiful life
:Now that is all there is.
The best thing I have ever tasted was when stuck in a saddle, legs broke (I thought) and
the rider came with a big
piece of roasted goat and the coffee in that tin can over the fire tasted like nectar from the gods.
Life took on a whole new meaning and it has been first class ever since.
Hope you get that feeling and it stays with you.
---
Eagle Cruagh

[Eagle Cruagh]

Country Girl,
Swings right leg over the saddle
While the left is still on the ground
Horse bolts away
Butt slapping the cantle
She pulls herself upright
Knees helding him hard
Both hands on the bulges
Country Boy can only think
and plan
---- Eagle Cruagh

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I love this little tale, its all put together and flows quite nicley.
A sweet little story i like the rhymes in it.
I enjoyed the read :)

[Traci]

This is the first piece of yours I've read and I like it a lot. It definitely had the feel of a country song. The lyrical nature and imagery were very well penned. I agree with Sarah, when you do find things in life that bring you joy they stay with you forever, they aren't just a phrase. Because of the enjoyment they bring, you always find a way to bring them back into your life, at some time, and place. Looking forward to reading more of your work.

[Meliss@k]

Thank you so much for your kind words Traçi!

[Luke L]

haha very nice, is this meant to be a song? It really has the feel of a country song, in my head.

[Meliss@k]

It was just a poem a wrote about what in going through in life at the moment, but you're the second person who stated that this poem has a lyrical "feel" to it, so maybe it should one day become a song :)

[Luke L]

perhaps :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That is what I call making the most of thing... growing pains are a pat of life but once they heal the experience will help lead the way.

[Meliss@k]

I fully agree! Thank you so much