About Me

Literally turned my Facebook "About Me" information into a poem a few years ago and just realized that since its a poem, I should post it on here.

She is a native Calitexican.
She is beautiful in God's sight,
She tries hard to fly a Christlike flight,
Intertwined beneath her shoe-lace strings she has many siblings and two great families,
California born,
But Texas raised and sworn,
Melissa hopes to sing and write the story of her great Lord.
If you catch her doing wrong,
Pull her aside and show her that in her eye is a very large thorn,
And when you catch her doing right, don't praise her at all, for she knows that she's beautiful in God's sight,
and that is the greatest praise she could ever live in delight.

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

Melissa, you write about the most important
thing in existance, but most people are looking
for more material things.
You can turn heads and hearts with that beautiful
smile, so smile a lot ..
There are no thorns in your writing, it is all good.
Thank you for that very nice piece, "About Me".
----- Eagle

[Meliss@k]

I appreciate every single on of your poems and reviews on my own! Thank you for taking the time to read "about me", Eagle.

[Eagle Cruagh]

Melissa,
Don`t stop too abruptly because I will be right there.
; -) ..... Now to keep you reading me--- I will have to
invent new stuff to keep you interested.
Thanks for the pleasant words.
----- Eagle

[Slug]

I like this! Optimistic and light
Although I may not follow any religion I do believe in the human need for spiritual fulfillment.
I think the about me mail idea you sent is pretty cool, although I hope you don't feel offended with mine
(:

[Meliss@k]

Getting offended doesn't help anyone religion or not. No one is offended here. Thank you for your review!

[Luke L]

Lovely, self-dedication. You have a very cute way of writing, very wide-eyed I think :).

[Meliss@k]

Thank you for taking the time to read some of my work Luke!

[Luke L]

you're welcome

[I Shred This Cabbage]

i won't refrain from praising you if I see fit...beauty and inspiration should be marked as such :)

[Meliss@k]

Thank you so much for your honesty John :)

[I Shred This Cabbage]

ha! i shall continue as i've started then :)

[Chris]

A very nice "About Me"

[Meliss@k]

Thank you Chris :)

[Chris]

Welcome

[allura]

i love this!

[Meliss@k]

Thank you allura!

[zainul]

Melissa,this poem reflects the sacred heart you are bestowed with.
I appreciate your honest statement and willingness to live a fair life.

[Meliss@k]

Thank you Zainul!

[zainul]

You are most welcome,smiling genius :)

[iliOZ]

i am not religious and i don't own a bible so obviously it is something else that caught my attention.
we don't really tell "about us" anymore.
good writing and it must be honest too.
thanks mel

[Meliss@k]

Thank you for your review iliOZ :)

[Augustus]

This is a cute little poem. The key to writing a good "cute" poem is to keep the lines relatively short, which you do except in a couple of places. Did you use "thorn" just because you wanted it to rhyme with "born" and "sworn"? If yes, it wasn't necessary. It broke the flow of your poem. I think you needed a shorter line there. But overall, considering that it's FB info turned into a poem, it's a pretty neat job. :)

[Meliss@k]

I used "Thorn" because their is a verse in the bible that I was alluding to and wanted to get that point across (the verse talks about a spec of dust though, and at the en of the verse it says "log"... You'll understand what I mean if you read it) :). The verse is Matthew 7:3

[Augustus]

Oh, ok. I didn't know that. I haven't read the Bible. I would still consider rephrasing that line though, even if you do keep the word thorn. From a strictly poetic point of view, I think it pegs your poem back a little bit.

[Meliss@k]

Thanks so much for the review :)

[Augustus]

You're welcome! :)

[Michael G. Smith]

I love this. You say so much that I believe and wish more others would. May God continue to bless our lives as we choose the right and build our faith.

[Meliss@k]

Thank you so so much. Is very important any for us as Christians to keep each other accountable, while not judging, yet being dedicated to Gods will for how a loving and faithful Christian should be :)

[Michael G. Smith]

Its in human nature to judge. Remember Christ said judge not; lest ye be judged. A lot of people are quick to throw out this scripture, usually when they are not living a good life. I am willing to be judged. The Lord said; My truth cuts through the guilty like a two-edged sword. You'll find as a parent you are going to do a whole lot of judging to protect your children. That's not to say we can know others hearts but must make decisions based on others actions.