Always

Always

A Poem by Melinda
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My failed attempt at a haiku :|

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O, My love, my sweet
Please, Dry your eyes,do not cry
Here I am..Always

© 2010 Melinda


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You dd not fail. This is a very good Haiku. Better than I could do. Although it is short (of course it is supposed to be) it shows great emotion. It Has a nice message behind it and it really shines in the Haiku world if you ask me. :)
-Dustin
I Love You

Posted 14 Years Ago


Trust me, it's not that bad. It's not bad to begin with. My first one (in Jr or Sr High) was, lets say "burning material". You've got putting a lot in three lines down. That's the hardest, I think. If you want some ideas, take a look at mine. (Yes, self-advertising) :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Aw, this certainly isn't failed. I like it. It was simple, yet heartfelt. I don't think you need the comma after "dry your" in the second line, though.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Added on May 22, 2010
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