Tonight

random poem I wrote few years ago.

Tonight
I am on the brink, holding...unsteady.
 Aroma of  fresh pink paint.

Listening to the rain washing over

classical ballads  thundering in the clouds

resonating from my speakers.

I am on the brink, hanging on thoughts
caught off balance now

exhausting his ears.

Anxiously on the edge

I am on the brink, slipping

on letters and a formula called life... so unsteady.

.

Gray streaks on dark strands

Secure me with a pin.

Breezing through my window

scattering the haze.

Pulling me...so unsteady.
laying still waiting...he will find me
hanging on... one
more night.

Reviews

[Dindella]

You and your fonting for emphasis. Stop being precious about it, God. I really have a soft spot for people who take the time to figure out what font works best for their writing, even if it's as simple as bold or italic or a combo of the two. It's just really nice and I adore the sort of love that takes. Your poems are very relatable as well, from what I've read so far, following the insecurities and anxieties of daily life with flecks of hope and desire slipped in so smoothly it doesn't break flow or feeling. It's wonderful. You're wonderful.

[Mel Lisa]

thank you so much for this, I truly appreciate your feed backs:)

[Lisa Bland]

Great poem. I could relate to it as i often fill asthough im on the brink.

[Shaquana Adams]

Captivating imagery. I really love the ending. Great job!
-QuanaWana

[Mel Lisa]

thank you Shaquana!

[RichGee]

Waiting and waiting...for love...for change...for peace...
Sometimes we just need to move on...
Great work. I really enjoy reading your art.

[Mel Lisa]

thank you RichGee!

[RichGee]

My pleasure

[New Theory]

Good poem Melicia... :). It is very beautiful and soothing.

[Mel Lisa]

Thank you very much for reading:)

[New Theory]

You are welcome. :)

[M]

Wow! what a great poem I felt flattered by reading it
."Anxiously on the edge
I am on the brink, slipping
on letters and a formula called life... so unsteady."
these lines are spectacular piece of writing.

[Mel Lisa]

thank you very much!

[Saheli]

Beautiful, Melecia! I especially loved the use of the refrain which brought out the tone of the poem brilliantly.

[Mel Lisa]

thank you! glad you enjoyed this:)

[Frieda P]

I really like that first stanza, typical night for many. On the brink, and waiting, waiting, waiting on that secure feeling...good read.

[Mel Lisa]

yes exactly! thanks for reading. Appreciate it very much:)

[Frieda P]

Was my pleasure Melecia. :-)

[AYVID N]

On the brink...so beautifully described. Hanging on is an art. Great work Melecia.

[Mel Lisa]

Thank you very much Divya!