Unbreakable

just random poem

They are like a swarm of disease carrying locusts, leaping about, swallowed up in their own chaos.

Spitting venom, snarling as it drips from their lips like mucus.

Crawling and creeping into your veins.

 

They are like migraines, pounding like jack hammers against your skulls.

Giving you unbearable headaches, buzzing and ringing in your ears,

they feast on that peace of your mind.

 

They are like sharp swords piercing with force and cutting through your

back down your spine. Crippling, paralyzing so you can never

move into action again.

 

They work you, absorbing, sucking all the life from you.

Leaving you drained, sick in bed, all your energy depleted.

 

But with all they do, with all their efforts, in between insincere smiles and phony

“How do you dos”

 

Remain invincible, unbreakable and defiant.

Reviews

[Justin]

You have such a way with words and the "how do you do's" part was perfect way to end it. Also like the last line.

[Mel Lisa]

thank you very much!

[Lostandfoundgirl]

love this poem! the words you chose! awesome!

[Mel Lisa]

thank you!

[Stefanie Holmes]

I love how you leave this poem open for the reader to put whatever their 'enemy' is. The thing that attacks them and brings them down. Everyone in life has that 'thing'. I loved the wording and the deep agony that was poured into each line... you certainly got the pain across easily! I enjoyed the read. :)

~Stefanie

[Mel Lisa]

thank you Stefanie!

[RichGee]

Great imagery....vivid and intense....misery sure does love company.
Very nice.

[SierraT]

Wow this is powerful, great imagery!

[Mel Lisa]

Thank you very much!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This poem has teeth!... I don't think I've ever seen a lotus in this way...
I find this piece unique and powerfully written..

Nicely done! xx :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Oh Wow!... Sounds scary! lol
well, you kicked their asses... Nicely done! XX :)

[Mel Lisa]

ol...yeah I just caught that! its suppose to say "locusts" oops I will correct that! they travel in packs. but these are like mutant, zombie locusts LOL. thanks for reading and reviewing!

[KeeD]

Amazing imagery, so well written! Really nice stuff

[Mel Lisa]

thank you so very much!

[Sarah Coll]

The imagery in this is amazing! Great write :)

[Mel Lisa]

thank you very much:)

[Baby Ricochet]

Some good imagery here. Good work

[Mel Lisa]

Thank you very much!

[WickedMagyk]

Intense. nicely put. and misery sure loves company.

[Mel Lisa]

true! lol. thanks for reading!