Black Night Eyes

This is a poem about my beautiful cat name Misty. She is vibrant and full of personality! but she is such a jumpy kitty sometimes...especially during a stormy night!

Black night eyes

Hanging in the hollow of the abyss

they chased the stormy nights away

within that yellowed gray.

 

 

Black night eyes 

Unhinged against the crippled doors.

 

Peeking through cracks, cower in your hiding place,

 

soothe away a troubled dream...

 

for things are not quite what they seem. 

 

Black night eyes

  

Open and full as the moon 

 

staring up against the darkened night,

Slipping away, scurrying silently out of sight.

 

 

Black night eyes

 

 

Glowing, dancing and swaying on silhouettes,

anticipating the early morning slits.

Settled in your yellowed gray...

 

As they chase the stormy night away.

Author's Note

I welcome your comments and critiques as long as it is constructive:)
I just want to grow as an artist and writer thank you so much:)

Reviews

[Aarea]

Very nice poem, INCREDIBLE details. I love your word choice, it's brilliant. Great poem. I noticed one thing though, and I am not sure if it is supposed to be like that, but is creeks supposed to be cracks in your second stanza? I don't know, but nice work anyway!!!

[Mel Lisa]

oh good catch. Cracks would sound better! thanks!

[Shaquana Adams]

I really like this tribute. It has a nice rhythm and feel to it.

[Mel Lisa]

thank you Shaquana

[Desiree B.]

Wow, great poem. Everything about just seemed to come together nicely. The pacing was even, the wording was vivid, and the idea was adorable. I felt as if I was looking at life from the eyes of a cat! Lastly, I really enjoyed your metaphor:

"Open and full as the moon"

Nice work!

[RichGee]

Very nice. Reads like a song...
I love it!

[New Theory]

Wow, it's got a "Raven" feel to it. beautiful poetry. Kudos.

[Mel Lisa]

really? that is a great honor. I love the Raven! Thanks for your review:)

[magenta24uk]

scurrying silently out of sight.
This line made me think of a rat or rodent. Was that the intent as it made the whole poem feel as though it was about something small in the dark. Waiting. I liked it I just wondered if I had got it?

[Mel Lisa]

well the poem is about a frightened cat...so it would be applied to the reaction of the subject. guess scurrying is predominantly used for rodents as well lol thanks for your comment.

[magenta24uk]

Ahhhh I see. Very good xx

[MoriartyMesa]

There was so much I know that you wanted to burst out, why did you hold back. Unless I am missing (which is rare) details?

[Mel Lisa]

this poem in particular was meant to have some mysteriousness to it. I tend not to write story length poems. Some (that I write) are long and detailed, others, like this one...are meant to be short. that's why I love writing poetry. freedom to express even on a slight whim. its simply about a moment of observing a cat.

[Vivie]

This is a well thorough poem! Eee, I wish I had a cat. Unfortunately, half the inhabitants of the house don't like animals, and no matter how I hold up even a tiny kitten, they always spurt out a big fat no. Although there was not any downright straightforward description of the cat's eyes, (That's not bad, it's actually really good), I found that the way you told it, all that time, I could picture large moon like cat eyes.

[Mel Lisa]

Thank you very much for your review. My cat was a rescued kitten. she is a black cat, very pretty too! Black cats get a bad rap sometime but they are truly the best!

[Vivie]

Ah, no problem! Black cats are beautiful no matter what anyone says about them. I mean come oon (http://i25.tinypic.com/2ngt0uc.jpg)

[flowetry07]

The rhythm of this poem is perfect it matches the playfulness of a cat and made me think of the one I have at home. Good work!

[Mel Lisa]

awesome! It was inspired by my own cat. Cats are the best pets ever! lol. thank you so much!

[EvilAngel133]

accept for couple of typos I thought it was great! I don't usually care much for poetry, however this was fantastic! I loved it!

[Mel Lisa]

thanks, I am still working on this one lol. Appreciate your review!