nothing

poetry

 

my thoughts are not sound enough to hear-

i am invisible dear-

nothing seems to matter-

i am lost here-

words unclear with bitter frost-

it must be winter-

my face is distantly blurred-

bitterness has its cost-

a sullen soul in heavy darkness-

candlelit fog guides me closer into the night-

moving softly steady through my life-

a callous mind can have its way-

another day, just another day away

all i knew crumbled between my fingers-

everything is lost

i am here to linger

 

 

 

Reviews

[Ghost of Jupiter]

This is great! Keep up the intriguing writes.

Ok I am fan of formatting and relevance of the formatting, you did great
the strike through is great and really fits in with this piece
-nice write-
-ST

[InkBlack]

First off I'd like to welcome you to WritersCafe and I'd like to read some more of your work :)

I can't see anything really wrong with this poem, it held my attention from beginning to end and I like how you decided to use equal signs instead of skipping lines, that was very creative :)

The only things I would fix are a couple nit-picky typos
-words unclear with bitter frost=it must be winter
-a sullen soul in heavy darkness=candlelit fog guides me closer into the night

Good job :) Keep on writing
Mil En Macabre

[Rhan F. Sydney]

This is a lovely piece of poetry. You've got great potential as a writer. I hope to see more of your work.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

You have created a lovely poem out of nothing and now it is something wonderful for us to read. Keep writing. You have talent beyond measure. Thank you for sharing. Debileah