An Affair Invitation

From thee who stood by your door the other day

THE DATE and VENUE

Blackest day,

draped by curtain

of white rain

Coldest gray,

thickly  misted

-purple muck

 

THE CELEBRANT

Bloodless red;

froze in those

amber veins

Dauntless scarlet;

cunningly shut-

tender buds

 

THE RECEPTION CENTERPIECE

                                                  Statue;

                                                  mere memoir of soul

                                                                         a fancy prosy.

                                                  Sepulchre;

                                                  throne of stone

                                                                         a pompous opus.

                                                  Casket;

                                                                         boat ride to Styx

                                                                         her hex vortex.

 

THE DRESS CODE

Sorrow is the color

most aptly worn:

collarless (headless),

buttoned- up,

silver- cuffed

 

Delight is the shade

angled by blade:

shoe and string-

knotted twice,

spat and waxed

 

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Author's Note

Wrote this on my smartphone just this morning after being woken up by the din of heavy rains.

Reviews

[Mark]

I enjoyed how you set the scene in colors, black day, white rain... purple muck. The 'boat ride to Styx, her hex vortex' is a great line. :) Marching toward 'The Dress Code' where your play with words sent images colliding in my head.

I can't say what meaning I get from the piece, but I did enjoy the way you seem to stretch and wring meaning from words. :)

[Amelie]

why thank you, Mark. I appreciate your thoughts. My words in this piece are just strands of fabric, the meaning is weaved by the one who reads it.

[TheDuchessDiary]

It's one of a kind! :D

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

the things you do with even the punctuation to make this flow. Sometimes you have to hammer a few nails halfway into the ground to make the obstacle course just right. And the concept of throwing the dress code in there alone is beyond my comprehension to express, not even to mention the execution that's happening. I must have had my head up my butt to have missed this for so long.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the first part reminds me of dormant passion, the second represents the woman with frozen veins, a heart cunningly shut.
the third part describes the speaker...stone cold, heart in a casket...cold reception...the dress code shows the speaker buttoned up, closed up...wearing her sorrow.
can he dissipate this sorrow...relieve her of it. unfreeze her?

anyway...i see transition, progression in this, until the end..with the knife and maybe severed ties...she still cannot commit.

very interesting writing..the placement on the page is good and works with theme.

jacob

[Amelie]

I read your review with great relish, Jacob. It delights me to know how my piece effected on various readers. Thank you for the fantastic review.

[Steven]

Your writing, and not to limit it to categories, but, is like a nouveau Poundian sort. If that's a description! But I enjoyed this trip down the page. Your imagery is crisp and sharp and played with my memories, just enough to draw me into this like hearing it from a friend. Lovely write. And could "Sepulchre" and "Casket" be changed to less direct imagery, keeping the mind playing at metaphors?

[Amelie]

Steven!I'll try to look onto that nouveau thing you mentioned :) Memories.. I guess that is where this came from. Funerals and cemetery landscapes fascinate me and I hope TMI won't freak you out.haha.
Cool that you pointed that out!but that is why I referred "Sepulchre" and "Casket" as "Reception Centerpieces", like a dandy flower arrangement that will set a little balance to the weight of the poem. But I just oh so like how you think!

[Steven]

Lol, I don't freak out easy. Yes, I can tell you put much thought into the particular placement and choice of each word.

[Amelie]

Aah, silly me...I forgot to say, thank you for the awesome review!:)

[Eagle Cruagh]

Funneee ! You live in a tin house ("din of rain").
Yet you use a smartphone and write in heavy
metaphorical symbolism.
An interesting piece.
----- Eagle Cruagh

[Amelie]

lol rains in here don't just come pit-a-pat on the roof, you would think it's literally raining cats and dogs if you're inside the house. And of course, thank you for reading :)

[no sun]

Mornings like that help make the best poetry. Love this piece. You allow your emotions to be shaped by your mood and the result is a unique and brilliant write. Has a Goth feel to it which helps make it so interesting.

[Amelie]

Thanks Ethan, I've been meaning to write something goth for quite some time, I'm glad this turned out somehow something like it. A little trivia: I thought of Edgar Allan Poe's Annabel lee, and you can very well might guess which part in there.

[no sun]

I would guess the Third Stanza of Annabel Lee which is one of my favorite poems ever. I am surprised I didn't notice it on my own that this piece has a Poe style and flow to it. Shame on me.

[Amelie]

Yep you nailed it, well most part of it cos it has "sepulchre" on it (which I often misspell) lol nah, shame on me and on that trivia, I made it seem of a big deal which isn't actually. thanks budd.

[no sun]

he uses sepulchre in the last stanza also. i picked the third stanza because of the gloomy weather it refers to.

[Amelie]

yep you are right there with all your referencing. thanks for pointing that out :)

[That_Girl]

The colorful imagery and way you play with the words is exceptional. I love it!

[Amelie]

thanks, Avy (or to that_girl with rad tats on the thumbnail pic) :)

[That_Girl]

Haha you're welcome. Well since I don't know who that is... Avy works. ;)

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

I like a Reception Centerpiece the best! So it's poetry on the go is it? :)

[Amelie]

thanks, well it's more like of a poetry on a cranky (morning) :/

[eglantine]

sounds like the setup or intro to a play--i like it