This was supposed to turn out a sonnet, but I got a little experimental. Still do notice the pattern and meters. And this is why I love my job; as long my boss sees me typing on my keyboard, he thinks it's work.
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I hate poems that start in 'twas a". I know I'm usually in for a snooze. This was steam and hellfire. Epic. Your stare coalesced with your whiskey breath.... sexy on lines. Can I make this a part of our new song? It's that good. And I am running out of s**t... I keep finding gold on this site. Lol.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
I too, sometimes hate it when the anglo- saxon crap in me dominates most of my stuff. But it happens.. read moreI too, sometimes hate it when the anglo- saxon crap in me dominates most of my stuff. But it happens all the hell time, quite my orientation. Oh thanks, and sure, I'm flattered. And I'll be damn stoked if you would ;)
12 Years Ago
The song's called "BeTheDirector". It has a few of your lines. I'll post it.Haha. I'm quick. Just ch.. read moreThe song's called "BeTheDirector". It has a few of your lines. I'll post it.Haha. I'm quick. Just changed a few lines.
~ you are a volcano of talent... i relate to "Your stare coalesced with your whiskey breath" a lot... reminds me of the mister whiskey breath i miss a lot... haha...!! ... sweet poetry, sweet poetess... very inspiring... :)
"twas an epic evening to say the least, I love the old style type of poetry it lends such a romantic heat, and the repeats work very well in this work of art, I can feel the shimmering heartbreak as the world falls down around them.
I hate poems that start in 'twas a". I know I'm usually in for a snooze. This was steam and hellfire. Epic. Your stare coalesced with your whiskey breath.... sexy on lines. Can I make this a part of our new song? It's that good. And I am running out of s**t... I keep finding gold on this site. Lol.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
I too, sometimes hate it when the anglo- saxon crap in me dominates most of my stuff. But it happens.. read moreI too, sometimes hate it when the anglo- saxon crap in me dominates most of my stuff. But it happens all the hell time, quite my orientation. Oh thanks, and sure, I'm flattered. And I'll be damn stoked if you would ;)
12 Years Ago
The song's called "BeTheDirector". It has a few of your lines. I'll post it.Haha. I'm quick. Just ch.. read moreThe song's called "BeTheDirector". It has a few of your lines. I'll post it.Haha. I'm quick. Just changed a few lines.
Good flow of thoughts and i like the repetition. The mind allowed us to ponder thoughts and actions. I enjoyed the poem. Made me think this morning.
Coyote
I like your playing with words like "Twas" or " 'en", and your flow.
I specially like the second stanza, i don't know, it's the most powerful to me!
Yeah lol, when i was at school on the subject of informatics, i was on the computer writing and thinking about the third stanza of my new song, and she thought i was a diligent child xD.. Thanks for sharing..Keep it up :D
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
Thanks mucho R.A. The 3rd stanza is also my favorite.
Lol the perks of office jobs and comput.. read moreThanks mucho R.A. The 3rd stanza is also my favorite.
Lol the perks of office jobs and computer classes :D
bwhahaha, there was def more, weird it didn't post... but sure, let's go with i for incredible
12 Years Ago
Precog ftw!
12 Years Ago
@Eglantine: lol haha,nah I still wanna know the rest though. but I dunno maybe you'd feel a bit weir.. read more@Eglantine: lol haha,nah I still wanna know the rest though. but I dunno maybe you'd feel a bit weird posting it after all of these.I would. precog lol.