Your poem seems to be alluding to something, all along, instead of just coming right out & saying what's going on. I don't do well trying to interpret such a poem with hidden meanings. I do like your use of the "ing" verbs, tho it contributes to an overall passive voice . . . a good selection used to describe living life in general, embracing ups & downs, plus you're consistent in forming lines with these "ing" verbs.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Hi Barleygirl!
Thank you for your lovely review.
Yes, this poem is not a straight poi.. read moreHi Barleygirl!
Thank you for your lovely review.
Yes, this poem is not a straight point poem.
I felt, there're lots of things have been absorbed in me that need to speak up.
Yes, those things are quite hard and emotional things, about our current situation (at least that what I felt/feel).
They frustrated me enough (still) to explain my feeling straightly.
And this poem's my first (real) experience in having Bible as my reference.
Well, I was (always) His tool.
Guess, the poem just had its time to experience it.
I am so glad knowing you enjoyed it in somehow... *wink
Your poem seems to be alluding to something, all along, instead of just coming right out & saying what's going on. I don't do well trying to interpret such a poem with hidden meanings. I do like your use of the "ing" verbs, tho it contributes to an overall passive voice . . . a good selection used to describe living life in general, embracing ups & downs, plus you're consistent in forming lines with these "ing" verbs.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Hi Barleygirl!
Thank you for your lovely review.
Yes, this poem is not a straight poi.. read moreHi Barleygirl!
Thank you for your lovely review.
Yes, this poem is not a straight point poem.
I felt, there're lots of things have been absorbed in me that need to speak up.
Yes, those things are quite hard and emotional things, about our current situation (at least that what I felt/feel).
They frustrated me enough (still) to explain my feeling straightly.
And this poem's my first (real) experience in having Bible as my reference.
Well, I was (always) His tool.
Guess, the poem just had its time to experience it.
I am so glad knowing you enjoyed it in somehow... *wink
You have made reference to the Bible in this poem. Not having a concrete knowledge of its content makes this poem difficult to understand and review.
It appears to be intimating about the return of the Saviour, and how His return will bring love and happiness upon the Earth. I am not a believer, but i understand the hopes and sentiments in this poem.
A nice poem, although it has been difficult for me to relate to and review.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you for your review!
I don't see you have any difficulty in understanding this poem, t.. read moreThank you for your review!
I don't see you have any difficulty in understanding this poem, thou. You are just doing great.
Yup, it refers to the Bible, but actually, the poem speaks in its words.
Again, thank you for giving time and taking an adventure in reading and reviewing this poem.
Really an honor!
Here is the verses, if you don't mind to read it: https://www.biblegateway.com/passage/?search=Matthew+24&version=NIV
I am a poetry from my parents and still continuing to be one without any plan in doing so. I live in Bali, Indonesia. I am an initiator of an art appreciation community, Free Your Mind. more..