A Theory - 2

God's love in man's love, what a blessing!

I found in just couple minutes ago, my American guy is coming back.

He just appeared and said, here I am, Love, I am back!

He opened his arms for his American way of thinking, back.

Guess, he has put the Samurai’s sword which was never his, to its place back.

 

I had his appearance, the appearance of my American guy, in silent.

No words could describe my feeling! I’d prefer to be silent.

Quiet from words, but not from good feeling, I was in gracious silent.

It was so gracious, made my heart cry out with joy, over joy of the silent.

 

He gave me a song, a song of how was his turbulent time.

A song that sang how great was our Savior at that time.

A song which is like a painting, with colors and drawing of that a bitter past time.

A song which me and my American man enjoy now for  a couple time.

 

He is back, stand and embrace those all he knew and he always knows.

He is back, and love me as he used to be, as like he knows.

Well honestly, now I like better the way he loves.

What could be better than having man’s love plus God’s love at the same time..? Abundant loves!

Reviews

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A poem full of joy and optimism.

It must be a wonderful thing to be loved by a man and a God, at the same time. Not all of us are that fortunate.
The poem is filled with the obvious joy and happiness of its writer, something that can never be understated in relation to the theme of the return of one's love.
It was interesting to see the use of the same word at the end of each line in each stanza. The only fault was the sudden change in this pattern in the final two lines of the poem.
Otherwise, a lovingly constructed and heartfelt piece of writing.

[MeithaSoekotjo]

Wow! An exquisite review!

You could see all that was written. And yes, those two final lines were what I called dilemma.
Anyway I will try to reconstruct it a.s.a.p.

Thanks for your comprehensive review.