You don't know me

scary kind of creepy

You cant see me

but you know I'm here

You feel it get colder in the air

 

You don't know me

but I know you

every night I come creeping through your dreams

 

I make little kids scream

I make adults feel uneasy

do you feel that

 

You don't know me

yet I'm here

watching you always

 

I know your every move

your every breath

you don't know me

 

Your not safe

I'm lurking around always

I see you every second

 

I give you goosebumps when you pass by

I keep you cold even on a summer night

I stare at you the whole night

 

You know I'm watching

but oh from where

haha the fright I see in your eyes

 

You don't know me

One day you will

I'm not going to hide forever

 

I'm coming to take you away with me

and never let go

You will stay with me

You will always know

Author's Note

think about the feeling of being watched

Reviews

[Shelley Wollstonecraft]

creepy but amazing :D love it

[Adri Moolman]

thank u

[smilempsn]

Its nite time here girl..... And that was really scary & creepy...!! :|

My heart stopped for a moment on

'You know I'm watching
but oh from where
haha the fright I see in your eyes'

[Adri Moolman]

Its almost midnight here.....and I wanted to get a scary pic for this...... Do me a favour and google scary and look at images, just to top it all of ;) sowy I freaked u out

[smilempsn]

Ewwwww... U really want me to have a heart attack Adri :|

[smilempsn]

Before you plan something else for me.. I will take ur leave...
GudNite.. ^-^
Hope I wont have any 'Nightmares' :|

[Adri Moolman]

Noooo*****rather think of smiles and other things

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Interesting. On the surface, this seems like a "stalker" piece, but I see a metaphor for either mental illness or for your own doubtful shadow. That little figure that sits on your shoulder and tells you that you aren't good enough or that you aren't going to make it...that is what I saw. Overall, i think that a few little technical clean-ups, like more consistent line lengths to help the beat and tempo, and a few different word choices, would make this fabulous.

[Adri Moolman]

Thank u

[quinfinn]

creepy.....shades of "one, two, freddy's coming for you".....paranoia is a b***h! nicely done...

[Adri Moolman]

Hahahahaha yeah tx

[Black Rose]

This is very scary because there really are people like this out in the world today. I love how you use that person's point of view throughout the entire poem.

[Adri Moolman]

Thank you*

[Daniel Hebert]

Interesting use of the perspective of the thing in the night. Very reminiscant of my writing style. I also enjoy the sense of isolation expressed by the thing in the dark which you are representing. As the small creaks and noises in the house are always terrrifying for me, I find this peice especially effective. Good job!

[Adri Moolman]

thanks so much

[Simon Welsh]

Love it. Creepy and devilish!

[Adri Moolman]

thanks so much